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Posted: July 22nd, 2023, 2:07pm Report to Moderator
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I liked the start and middle. Didn't really feel for her suddenly swoop out a gun and threaten him - that was a bit random for me, although expected. I think you could build to it better - maybe have her more in the script, she's not a driving force there and then suddenly she is so proactive.
The ending with the cat is brilliant.
SimplyScripts references are always a plus!!

Overall it's very entertaining. I couldn't wait to see what will happen to him and his funny addiction.
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