G.I.S. (Global Internet shutdown) by Bernard Mersier - Short, Sci Fi, Fantasy - As humanity comes to a violent end, one person stands on a skyscraper watching, explaining why the apocalypse is taking place. 2 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Rather than a super-long monologue entirely in VO, consider introducing a minor character.

Somebody that Delusion can be speaking with, breaking things up with a bit of back-and-forth, maybe even asking a few questions along the way.

Delusion can still say the same stuff, and the late reveal can stay the same, but another character, perhaps even a confused child, could give this more heft.

I liked the ending. I though it might work better if Delusion were standing atop a cathedral, talking to a stone gargoyle perhaps- as it is there seems no need for a monologue. I also wondered how this could be "filmable" with so much chaos and destruction going on below (TV clips perhaps, like M. Night Shyamalan does).