I agree with Frank. Easily fixable with -
Free screenwriting software. https://www.trelby.org/
I got a tip from an informant of mine, and
they said this is a trap house for gangs.
Big gaps between character & dialogue need to go. Parentheticals are formatted as below:
(Whispering to officer Knight). What are
we doing here?
(Whispering to officer Knight)
What are we doing here?
If you Fade Out, you need to Fade In again.
SCENE FADES BACK TO (should not be in a description line.
NEWS ANCHOR (WOMEN’S VOICE):
Formatted incorrectly. This should be under character. And it would be: Woman's voice (singular).
DET. DUNCAN IS FURIOUS. THIS IS HIS TURNING POINT TO
A line like this has to be shown, not told.
Should be present tense (smiles)
INT: DUNCAN HOUSE. FAMILY IS WATCHING LOCAL TV.
INT. DUNCAN HOUSE - DAY
The family is glued to a news report on TV. (This in your action/description line, not included in the scene header.
Anyway, I'll stop there.
P.S. I have to add this:
HELMER IS IMMEDIATELY REJUVINATED IN HIS CAUSE TO
AVENGE HIS FATHER. OVER THE NEXT YEAR DUNCAN HAS
BUILT A SECRET HUB UNDERNEATH HIS HOUSE. HE HAS A
TUNNEL LEADING FROM HIS BEDROOM UNDERGROUND AND
EXITS NEAR A SWAMP 26MILES AWAY. HE HAS ALL THE
OFFICERS NAMES AND ADDRESSES ON A BULLETIN BOARD.
HIS HUB IS VERY HIGH TECH. HIS WIFE AND KIDS DO NOT
KNOW ABOUT THE HUB. HE DECIDES TO BECOME A VIGILANTE
AND AVENGE THE VICTIMS. HE TARGETS THE HOMES OF THE
THREE OFFICERS WHO WERE FOUND NOT GUILTY.
7PM. FRIDAY NIGHT.
How do we know all this above?
You have to show it through the actions of the character.
The only other way to show this is via text on screen or a Voice Over.
Also a time has to be written as a Super. It's not a slug on its own.