I enjoyed it. The dialogue was great I liked how he gushed over her (kinda rude she kept trying to deny). I feel for her though if she has burst out and tell about her business to him. I get it. i had a death in my family and I say i shared more than anyone who know and didn't know me at the time. It just happens. Hope to read more. Soon?

Clark;
Thanks. I know this happens with people, very much like you’ve described. I appreciate the encouragement.  
Roland J

Hey Roland J

(thanks for the PM letting me know you added some more).

I’m a little confused as to Dorothy’s attitude when Ralph  just says ‘it was hell on on earth” and she goes into “being a negro is hell on earth” before they had a kind of heartfelt exchange, but I was like what’s her problem.  Maybe if he set her up with more about the struggles of being black etc, but he’s opening up and she just wham!

Dorothy seems to make it all about her (LOL) Ralph tries to talk about himself and she makes it back to her thinking she may not make it to forty.

Question: why did Ralph add his comment of ‘you look lighter on screen’?

Okay after her outburst about her job I can see the “being a negro is hell on earth” she seems to be really angry.

I like Ralph (am I wrong in thinking his dialogue, like he was or could hit on her?).

I like what you added. I’d like to see more about her talk about her baby and maybe that brings up more anger? Also, Ralph maybe he could get a word in edge wise and get to talk more about his tour of duty (maybe a way to compare his time in service and how treated to how she is mistreated in Hollywood)?

Just a thought, not trying to be a backseat typer. LOL  

PM when do more!

Clark;
Good point about her comment ...”hell on earth” Perhaps needs to be repositioned when she talks about her troubles in Hollywood.
Actually this story really is all about her. People at the time idolized DD, but quietly felt she was out of touch with her blackness. Unlike Lena Horne who was always quite outspoken about her mistreatment by Hollywood, DD was reserved and private about how she was treated. But she was quite bitter about racism. When you read the 2nd half of the script, most of your questions will be clarified.
But I appreciate the input and your observations. I’ll certainly notify folks when I finally get it finished.