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JustinS
Posted: February 25th, 2023, 6:49pm Report to Moderator
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Hey all. As follows is the rough draft of a pilot script for an animated TV serial I've been working on, incorporating elements of drama, comedy, and surrealism.

The logline is as follows: A student at a Tier 1 university discovers that he can monetize his intelligence by running an underground tutoring service.

Link to the PDF is here: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1dA8GU142fkzIC170WitclpCFg1X4Uyxb/view?usp=sharing

Any feedback would be greatly appreciated! Thanks,

-J
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JustinS
Posted: March 2nd, 2023, 10:58am Report to Moderator
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Attaching the third draft here - 34 pages and a stub to reflect the animated, half-hour format. Made a lot of cuts and revisions and tried to make the characters (especially Kevin) a bit more believable. Also tried to hint at future conflict without getting too far ahead of myself / giving it away. Big reorderings of a lot of the scenes, some scenes taken out, etc.

Here's the link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1pcIUR170O7s9g8aOCi6AYaqVyyxSf801/view?usp=sharing.

"Never Seen" is a working title - haven't come up with one that truly resonates with the show in the way I want yet.
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