Logline: A leader of a criminal organisation realises that he has fallen for the wrong woman, his best friend's girlfriend.

Link to the script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1c_2ZaIdpMPF_buaBbZzu4JIzR0viTIPP/view?usp=sharing

Would really appreciate feedback on the following:

Do I have a clear beginning , middle and end?

What do you think about the dialogue?

Have I used the whole 'subject + verb' rule correctly?

Is the resolution an interesting one? The flashforwards are meant to be visions that are cut during the last embrace we see on screen.

Lastly, the title is a work in progress so do not fret about that please.

Thank you in advance for the feedback.