Story of the Upper Limb by Joseph Cahill - Short - Wonder what God is up to? 12 pages - doc, format

Joseph

Ok I kept waiting for the hook to drop. It never did. Your story had no inciting incident, irony, or twist. It was just god playing solitare and spouting off medical terms. Good discription of the terms... but no meat to the story. It would be much better if you gave it a twist or some irony of god playing solitare.

Maybe he is gambling with the devil over a heated match of seven card stud. If he wins the upper limb is perfect if he loses the upper limb becomes mutated and all kinds of bad things happpen to the human race. Just a thought.

Spencer

Spencer,
Thanks for the read and the post. You know, this script was originally written for a project at school. A professor wanted me to write something so that students would be able to remember the bones of the upper limb a little easier. That´s the reason it´s filled with anatomy jargon and it really doesn´t have a hook...I wasn´t planning on posting it at SS but decided to anyways. Thanks for the ideas, as well...

Joseph