SimplyScripts Discussion Board
Blog Home - Produced Movie Script Library - TV Scripts - Unproduced Scripts - Contact - Site Map
Welcome, Guest.
It is September 20th, 2019, 5:46am
Please login or register.
Was Portal Recent Posts Home Help Calendar Search Register Login
If you wish to join this discussion board, please send me a message. Please do read the guidelines that govern behavior on the discussion board. It will make for a much more pleasant experience for everyone. A word about SimplyScripts and Censorship

Scripts Studios are posting for award consideration
The August/September Challenge has begun!

Short Script of the Day | Featured Script of the Month | Featured Short Scripts Available for Production | Submit Your Script

How do I get my film's link and banner here?
All screenplays on the and domain are copyrighted to their respective authors. All rights reserved. This screenplaymay not be used or reproduced for any purpose including educational purposes without the expressed written permission of the author.
Forum Login
Username: Create a new Account
Password:     Forgot Password

SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board    Unproduced Screenplay Discussion    Short Scripts  ›  Keyboard Warrior Moderators: bert
Users Browsing Forum
No Members and 3 Guests

 Pages: 1
Recommend Print
  Author    Keyboard Warrior  (currently 614 views)
Posted: January 6th, 2009, 9:29pm Report to Moderator

So, what are you writing?

Posts Per Day
Keyboard Warrior by Arjun Miglani - Short, Comedy - He Will Dystroy You… On the Internet. 12 pages - pdf, format

Visit for what is new on the site.

You will miss 100% of the shots you don't take.
- Wayne Gretzky
Site Private Message
Posted: January 7th, 2009, 12:23am Report to Moderator

Continuity Is For Pussies...

Posts Per Day
Hello hello. Very funny script. Few small things...

-Kane's speech on page 4, and Max's last speech is too long. Split it up with something small, even if it's, "Kane takes a sip from a can of coke" in the middle of it. Just to give the old eyes a rest.

-At the start I don't understand why Max is annoyed...

-The interviewer should give a reason why he/she is there. Give it a touch more realism.

-End of page 1. 8 and a half lines of action. Too much. Try to stick to 4 or 5.

-I don't think Elaine would throw the phone away after she realises Max wasn't sending a message. Maybe just chuck it on the table? Also, having Kane pick up his phone and start "texting" straight after... it's a bit soon.

-Loved the 2 girls 1 cup reference. Loved all the dialogue actually. Some REALLY good stuff in there. Similar to The Office. Are you a fan? Or Curb.

This is the type of script I want to write. So well done.

Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 1 - 1
 Pages: 1
Recommend Print

Locked Board Board Index    Short Scripts  [ previous | next ] Switch to:
Was Portal Recent Posts Home Help Calendar Search Register Login

Forum Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post polls
You may not post attachments
HTML is on
Blah Code is on
Smilies are on

Powered by E-Blah Platinum 9.71B © 2001-2006