I can't give you any feedback on the script, haven't read it. But I would suggest a new logline as it doesn't sell the story very well. Is the story about Carl or about Ron? It is listed as a comedy but I don't see anything in the logline to indicate that it would be funny. I am also guessing you meant to say Ron has been 'married' three times? Overall it just doesn't grab me at all and make me want to read it, which is the what you should be trying to accomplish.