I read the first twelve pages, or so, of this script. Unfortunately, there was nothing there to make me want to read further. It was sophomoric and unfunny; while being immature, in itself, isn't really a problem, being immature and unfunny is.
The opening scene was extremely unfunny. And opening with a masturbation joke just screams "Sorry folks, this is the best we got!"
And since when is a bank unwilling to put a stop payment on a check? They charge a fee for that. Why would they turn down such money?