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Don
Posted: January 14th, 2012, 12:23pm Report to Moderator
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The Taco Cart by Zack Van Eyck - Short, Comedy - A food inspector's life is turned upside down when he develops a taste for dog meat tacos.  Male lead, 20s or 30s. Three male supporting roles; young, middle-aged and older. Several minor roles. Three locations: downtown street exterior; interior trailer; interior prison cafeteria. Comedy, 10 pages. - pdf, format


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Who is Zack? Come out where ever you are? This the fifth script from Zack in the last three weeks and I have never seen a reply from him.

Don’t mean to rant, it’s just...he took the time to post these scripts and I’m sure he’s looking at our feedback but nothing. It’s time to respond Zack.

Rant over...maybe. It’s late.

Steve
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No, it's a fair point.

I like the idea of reviews given to newbies as a way to entice them on to the boards but that's only once.

Zach, you going to take part? If you are reading but haven't posted so far, go on give it a go.

All the best.


My scripts  HERE

The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville
Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final
Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards.  Third - Honolulu
Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place
IMDb link... http://www.imdb.com/name/nm7062725/?ref_=tt_ov_wr
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Thought I'd give it a quick read...
...and like most of his recent scripts - it really is quite c-rap.

Problem is, I think, is that I recently saw SS quoted on quite a useful website (bummer that I can't recall which one), but it had SS down as a repository... so we've got a copyright geek here who's just dumping his rubbish here as protection.

...not that it's going to need it.

Wide berth from hereon.
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Well, there certainly seems to be a lot of venom on this site!  I'm surprised.

First of all, no, this is the first time I've seen these posts.  I did not know until someone e-mailed me about 10 days ago that there was feedback here, and I've been super busy with two contract scripts since I posted all of these, so I'm just getting a chance to check out the feedback.  When I posted these shorts, I didn't see anything about checking back periodically to read feedback.  I had no idea that's how things worked here.  I assumed it was like InkTip.

Hmm, I have never been referred to as a "copyright geek" before so that's a new one!  I register all of my scripts with the WGA.  I posted my scripts here in hopes that producers would see them and perhaps buy them -- isn't that the idea, here?  -- and that's exactly what's been happening, so that's quite exciting.

I would be interested to hear SiColl007's feedback on this script, and all of my other scripts since he says they are all "quite c-rap."  I have no problem with constructive criticism and I welcome it.  But to simply dismiss ALL of my work as being unworthy, without saying why, seems disrespectful to me.  It''s also disappointing.  Is this the type of behavior that this Web site promotes?  Or was SiColl007 just having a bad day?

Since I posted these shorts, four of them have been sold.  And I sold six other short scripts in 2011 before I discovered this Web site.  So, I am fairly certain that not all of my work is c-rap.  If SiColl007 would like to take another look at this, or any of my other scripts, I'd appreciate any constructive feedback he might have.

This short was previously sold in 2007 to a Canadian producer, along with "Babes in Soyland."  I recently convinced him to give them back to me since he had yet to make them.  "Babes" is one of the scripts that sold after I listed it here.  It would be great to find a home for this one as well.

I'm having a staged reading of this script at We Make Movies in Hollywood on March 14.  I'll take the feedback I receive there, and any useful feedback I receive here, and do a rewrite at that time.

Thanks a lot!

Zack Van Eyck
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Who is Zack? Come out where ever you are? This the fifth script from Zack in the last three weeks and I have never seen a reply from him.

Don’t mean to rant, it’s just...he took the time to post these scripts and I’m sure he’s looking at our feedback but nothing. It’s time to respond Zack.

Rant over...maybe. It’s late.

Steve


Hey Zack,

May be the first to welcome you to the boards. Great to see you chiming in and responding to feedback and I would like to apologise for my above comments or any other which I may have directed to you.

Congrats on getting some of your work noticed and produced.

If you would like me to look over any of your work, feel free to pm me

Have a good one.

Steve
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Hi Zack,

Glad you found the discussion board.

As I mentioned above, I am happy to give feedback but it is nice to see the writers take part in this process as well.

To be honest I'm not sure you are after comments, since this seems to be more about promoting your work rather than reviewing it (nothing wrong it that), but if you do want comments then I am happy to swap reviews as a starter. Let me know.

Cheers


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The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville
Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final
Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards.  Third - Honolulu
Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place
IMDb link... http://www.imdb.com/name/nm7062725/?ref_=tt_ov_wr

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Posted: February 14th, 2012, 4:06pm Report to Moderator
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Hey Zack,

you said you sold this short in 2007 to a Canadian producer? perhaps you would like to post a link where we can see the finished product?

furthermore, A LOT of contributing members have posted reviews on your scripts. how many reads have you returned? you have a post count of 7. i'd say it's time to get busy.

personally, this will be the last time I read one of your scripts until you return the favor. i know you don't have to, but it's frustrating. you're the one at fault, not Sicoll007 or any other poster.

and fyi, i did take a look at this one. it wasn't very good IMO. too many things going on, way too many characters, and just genuinely disinteresting. plus it was very unbelievable as a whole.


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Zack,

I'll start by saying you need a SUPER not slug for ONE WEEK LATER or the viewer will have no idea a week has past.

Sheltie's reaction to being caught is a bit too far fetched, but then the ending might explain this.

SPOILER!!



I enjoyed this until the end and then was slightly confused as I was a little slow to realise what was happening.  Max eating mushrooms and hallucinating right?  Anyway, taking this with a pinch of salt and tongue in cheek, I thought this was very funny.  There are few minor errors but unfortunately I didn't make a note of them.  I prefer to concentrate on the story anyway and I this did its job of being entertaining and funny.


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I'm going to have to study Zack's style and work to see what he's doing right since he's had so much success in getting things produced.  I've been writing for years and have zero produced.  


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don't mean to hijiack this thread, but marnieml i'm going to assume that's sarcasm. hopefully it is, because i doubt our friend's claims here. at the most, an amateur director probably produced one of his scripts.

when it comes to getting a short produced, you need to think realistically. i wrote a script called Abra Kadabra about 3 years ago and I STILL get requests to make it into a short. why? because it was super simple and easy to shoot. it was about two battling street magicians and required no special effects whatsoever. the same can be said about a few of my other shorts. write a short that can be made with just a few actors, a camera, and an empty apartment and you'll be flooded with requests.

i hope that helps/inspires


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Quit jerking the guy around.

http://www.imdb.com/name/nm1936999/

He just found the boards yesterday, and he'll be back or he won't.

But a shame to chase him off.


Hey, it's my tiny, little IMDb!
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I was actually being serious.  Zack has obvioulsy found a formula that works.  


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Zack.
Nice little BIO you have there.
First of all, im one of the guys who doesn`t get the whole "Male lead, 20s or 30s. Three male supporting roles; young, middle-aged and older. Several minor roles. Three locations: downtown street exterior; interior trailer; interior prison cafeteria." in the logline... I noticed it in all your scripts, I have never seen it before.

The script itself was nothing exciting, basically back and forth on the dog meat/rat meat /pigeon... it`s a comedy a get it, nothing I haven`t seen before.
Some over the top lines.

Page 4
Since he married his sister..... Where exactly are we?

Page 5 One week Later.... Needs to be Super: One Week Later

Page 9   2 Indian elephants...Really! I know comedies are exaggerated dramas but a little OTT

Page 9 again Weeks later... Needs to be super : weeks later

You had a few little twists in there, that came together at the end which was nice...But overall IMO wasn`t a fan sorry

Mark


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maybe im just subconciously hating b/c im jealous you sell these for actual money but this was a chore to read.

no offense, im one guy, but this is the longest 10 page short I've read on this site, it just kept going and going.  The last few pages were all over the place.

congrats on the sale I guess.  


I'd list my "work" here, but I don't know how to hyperlink.  

"Career" Highlights
-2, count em, 2 credits on my IMDB page.  
-One time a fairly prominent producer e-mailed me back.  
-I have made more than $1000 with my writing!
-I've won 2 mugs... and a thong.  (polaroids of me in thong available for $10 through PM)

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