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Don
Posted: December 18th, 2014, 6:26pm Report to Moderator
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Cover Band by Mark Rupprecht - Series, Action, Adventure - When North Korea's Beloved Leader demands a one-night-only performance, an iconic  rock band (and secret CIA agents) must put aside their differences and reunite for that most worthy of causes: using the show to steal the codes to the North Korean nuclear program! 60 pages - pdf, format


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SUPER: "EAST BERLIN, 1986"

PATRICK WRIGHT, mid 30ís, an unyielding CIA man, observes.

Alert at the door, LENNY, 40ís, sausaged in his suit.



You can't use a super as a slug... ah, I see what you've done. You've placed the super halfway through the scene and then intro'd new characters. Confused me for a second. I'm going to leave this here though for you to mull over. I'd suggest placing the super at the start.

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PATRICK (contíd)
Youíll be with my best men.

Patrick barks out an order to Lenny.

PATRICK (contíd)
Get me the band!


The above is a little confusing too. Personally I'd take the action line and turn it into a parenthetical (to Lenny).

I've read a couple of pages and it seems written well for the most part. Probably some confusing bits here and there, but not anything major.


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I gotta say, I didn't care much for your title at first. Kinda bland. Until I realized it was a play on words. A rock band who are really undercover CIA agents? That's a brilliant concept for a series.


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