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Queen by Nikki April Lee - Short, Drama - A sweet androgynous teen conflicted with sexual identity, makes a great sacrifice to free his kid sister from the grasps of their tyrannical father. 11 pages - pdf, format
This one was both good and bad for me. It was good in dialogue and overall writing. It was bad in the standard shackle and beating scenes and guessable ending. There seems to be no justice for the Queen and no punishment for the typical parents. This is a story that's been done a lot, so I think you might work for some unique angle or reversal that will make your audience stand up and take notice.
So the opening and closing images are pretty much the same. I understand the desire to do that but would prefer something more creative at the end. Something that might suggest more growth and change. I did find the whipping scene to be a bit cliche.
I'm afraid I don't get Angelo. How did he die? What was his relationship to Birdie and Elijah other than bandaging Elijah in the basement? Went through the script a couple of times trying to piece it together and it just doesn't fit for me. Am I missing something?
on page three, "Elijah manages to open the truck to his tiny beat up car.", I think you might have wanted the word "trunk" instead of "truck".