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Zombies in Love (currently 2527 views) |
Don |
Posted: January 25th, 2018, 2:24pm |
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AdministratorAdministrator So, what are you writing?
LocationVirginia Posts16561 Posts Per Day 1.92 |
Zombies in Love by Fausto Lucignani - Short, Horror, Romance - After two centuries since their deaths, two lesbian zombies meet in a cemetery and fall in love. 5 pages production: Shoestring production 3 zombies and one location - pdf, format
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Don - January 25th, 2018, 5:48pm | page count wrong. | | |
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Warren |
Posted: January 25th, 2018, 4:50pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3890 Posts Per Day 1.28 |
So that just happened... I don't have the words. |
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Don |
Posted: January 25th, 2018, 5:52pm |
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AdministratorAdministrator So, what are you writing?
LocationVirginia Posts16561 Posts Per Day 1.92 |
So that just happened... I don't have the words. |
The words are: "odious liquid" and "dark, coagulated blood" and "awesome". Somewhere there is a film student sitting on ten gallons of stage blood and zombie makeup that needs to find this script. Don |
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bert |
Posted: January 26th, 2018, 2:41pm |
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AdministratorBuy the ticket, take the ride
LocationThat's me in the corner Posts4237 Posts Per Day 0.60 |
Haha. My only problem is that I am not getting why this has so much dialogue. |
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Heretic |
Posted: January 26th, 2018, 3:44pm |
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LocationVancouver, British Columbia, Canada Posts2019 Posts Per Day 0.27 |
10/10. Somebody get this in a theatre so I can watch it. |
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Warren |
Posted: January 26th, 2018, 4:16pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3890 Posts Per Day 1.28 |
10/10. Somebody get this in a theatre so I can watch it. |
Really so that's where the bar is. Wow. |
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khamanna |
Posted: January 26th, 2018, 4:20pm |
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Warren |
Posted: January 26th, 2018, 4:29pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3890 Posts Per Day 1.28 |
Actually now that you mention it, why wouldn't I want to watch 90 minutes of two dead humans groaning at each other and being intimate while their rotting bodily fluids leak out of them.
You make a very good point. |
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eldave1 |
Posted: January 26th, 2018, 6:02pm |
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LocationSouthern California Posts6874 Posts Per Day 1.86 |
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James McClung |
Posted: January 26th, 2018, 6:57pm |
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Of The Ancients
LocationWashington, D.C. Posts3293 Posts Per Day 0.47 |
Don't wanna say too much here, lest I come off as taking an intentional lark too seriously. I also haven't reviewed anything here in a while, so I don't know if "Writer interested in feedback" has proved a reliable indicator that the writer is indeed around to read it. What I will say is that I agree with Bert. The dialogue's gotta go. I straight up didn't read it. |
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Fausto |
Posted: February 5th, 2018, 2:43pm |
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LocationNew Jersey Posts193 Posts Per Day 0.06 |
First of all, thank you very much for reading my script! You have been very courageous indeed...but, please, let's give the zombies a chance to express their feelings through dialogue. The two women want to spend their deaths together. My best, Fausto |
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Kirsten |
Posted: February 6th, 2018, 7:03am |
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LocationKiwi in Ohio Posts373 Posts Per Day 0.13 |
Lmao, nice one Fausto... thats the very first lesbian zombie, incredibly soft porn short ive read 😁. P.s the dialogue is a liitle on the nose....😊 |
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Fausto |
Posted: February 6th, 2018, 7:57am |
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LocationNew Jersey Posts193 Posts Per Day 0.06 |
Hi Kirsten, thank you for reading this unusual story. Regarding the dialogue, I see your point but please keep in mind that this is the way zombies talk...very simple and repetitive. Best regards, Fausto |
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Fausto |
Posted: February 6th, 2018, 9:13am |
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LocationNew Jersey Posts193 Posts Per Day 0.06 |
Khamanna, thank you for your suggestion...a feature zombie script is not a bad idea...I have to think about an original story. Thank you for reading. My best, Fausto |
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Heretic |
Posted: February 7th, 2018, 10:46am |
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LocationVancouver, British Columbia, Canada Posts2019 Posts Per Day 0.27 |
Really so that's where the bar is. Wow. |
I think there's a lot to be said for a simple story told simply. The ladies love each other even in death -- it's a nice idea and it's well-expressed in a visually interesting way. To me it's the same impulse of total sincerity that drives great movies like Before Sunrise or Brawl on Cell Block 99. |
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