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The Employee by Charles Harding - Short, Thriller - A young man working at an internet company uncovers a dark secret that could change the world. 19 pages - pdf format
Does not belong on the first page - it should be on a title page.
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EXT. CREATE TECH COMPANY BUILDING DAY
Wrong format. Should be:
EXT. CREATE TECH COMPANY BUILDING - DAY
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A thirty story building with a distinct and monolithic look. It’s an architect’s wet dream. The building garners attention with its sharp design. The sun beams off its many freshly cleaned windows. Conservatively dressed people enter the premises evoking an astute professional manner.
A bit over written - you're kind of beating it to death.
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The company is a technological marvel. The front lobby is huge, with receptionists desks about twenty feet apart. Gold plated elevators taking people up and down. Walls full of pictures of lap tops and happy customers enjoying them
Okay - now you are inside the building - you need to add a new scene heading.
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