The Employee by Charles Harding - Short, Thriller - A young man working at an internet company uncovers a dark secret that could change the world.  19 pages - pdf format

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Charles - lots of issues from the start.

This

Quoted Text THE EMPLOYEE SHORT SCRIPT BY CHARLES HARDING

Does not belong on the first page - it should be on a title page.

Quoted Text EXT. CREATE TECH COMPANY BUILDING DAY

Wrong format. Should be:

EXT.  CREATE TECH COMPANY BUILDING - DAY

Quoted Text A thirty story building with a distinct and monolithic look. It’s an architect’s wet dream. The building garners attention with its sharp design. The sun beams off its many freshly cleaned windows. Conservatively dressed people enter the premises evoking an astute professional manner.

A bit over written - you're kind of beating it to death.

Quoted Text The company is a technological marvel. The front lobby is huge, with receptionists desks about twenty feet apart. Gold plated elevators taking people up and down. Walls full of pictures of lap tops and happy customers enjoying them

Okay - now you are inside the building - you need to add a new scene heading.