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Don
Posted: September 14th, 2018, 5:23pm Report to Moderator
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So, what are you writing?

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CandyCellers by Benin Trotter - Drama, Family Drama, Gangster - Where "The Pursuit of Happyness" meets "American Gangster". Late 70's  Portland is brought to life by a Black female, ex-con, Harrie, who resorts to selling candy as she struggles with the system and ex, Big Dee, for custody of their son, P'nut. 119 pages

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I'm no expert and waiting for my first script to post. I read the first six pages and noticed spelling errors. I get the dialogue uses a lot of slang, but I feel the ACTION LINES should use proper grammar/spelling. As I said, I'm no expert and still finding grammar and spelling issues even after going over my script 3-4 times.

ALSO...if you're using Amazon's free Story Writer, I've noticed after I corrected errors, I go back and the original errors reappear days later.  >

GOOD LUCK!


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eldave1
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Don't do this:


Quoted Text
EXT. WOMEN’S CORRECTIONAL FACILITY - SALEM, OREGON - NIGHT
(SUMMER 197.

Douglas firs dominate a moist daisy-chain of illumination
encircling barbed security fences and rain-streaked
barracks.


Do this:

EXT. WOMEN’S CORRECTIONAL FACILITY - NIGHT

Douglas firs dominate a moist daisy-chain of illumination
encircling barbed security fences and rain-streaked
barracks.

SUPER: SALEM, OREGON - SUMMER, 1978



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Benin
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Good suggestions. Made some corrections. Thank you
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eldave1
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Quoted from Benin
Good suggestions. Made some corrections. Thank you


My pleasure


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