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Sweet little short you have here. I liked it a lot.
I liked the first few pages, and Edith's belief that everyone who makes something themselves put some of their energy in it, and how Noah's mom puts love in the food for him to eat. Just the idea in general is heartwarming.
My only gripe is that I'd like to see a passage of time between when Noah attempts to finish the scarf to when he does finish the scar and lays it on the coffin in the funeral home scene. A short montage of him struggling, then he gets the hang of it, then he gets better. The scarf can still be amateurishly made, but at least we see it happening instead of a cold cut to it being finished.
Additionally, when did Edith die? She went to the hospital, yes, but how much time passed until she passed? It must've been a while for Noah to learn how to make a scarf but it'd be kind of nice to know roughly how much time had passed, which is why I suggested a montage of Noah learning how to knit. Otherwise, Edith could've passed away the same day she went to the hospital, and her funeral could've been 5 days later, and I don't think Noah could've learned how to finish a scarf in that amount of time. Maybe he could, if he had a talent for it. I dunno, just a thought. These are merely suggestions.
Otherwise, solid script, I liked it a lot. Good job.
Thank you so much for reading the script, I appreciate your time and feedback!
I have to admit I struggled with the issue you mentioned. Obviously, a young boy can't learn how to knit so fast (if at all), and it's probably important to show some sort of timeline where he would keep pursuing the craft. I'll think about how to improve it.