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Well, I can see why this has got the plaudits it has.
'Dog Years' is beautifully written with lots of poignant moments and wonderfully descriptive passages. You balance the sweet with the sour harsh reality narrative very well.
A lot of passages really resonated:
HARVEY That’s ’cos the pain of the past is closer now, than the joy of the future
FRED The dog years. They’re a snapshot of an era. So, don’t slow down and don’t speed up. Just... be in the moment.
Great touches of humour too: The ongoing references to Glengarry Glen Ross, and, Mon petit chou fleur? Very nicely done. ...
A few typos I noticed, bearing in mind these ones just stuck out:
One of the barber’s waves at Bobby barbers
She looks at Barley, as Bobby’s continues to sob. She mouthes the words... "Thank you". mouths Bobby (singular)
He has some seperation anxiety. But now he’d found his forever home, I’m sure he’ll thrive.
Typo: should be 'separation' And: Should that be: he's found...? ... Throughout the script you write 'lay' (past tense) when it should be 'lie'. Plenty of writers do this so you're not alone, but it's a bugbear of mine. It obviously has not affected you doing well with this script, and nor should it. However -
Examples: BARLEY, an elderly collie-cocktail, lays by the front door. Lies by the front door To lay down To lie down Barley lies down a small girl lays on the floor A small girl lies on the floor
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Dog Years Take a trip down memory lane. The paw-sibilities are endless.
Fun fact: Did you know 1 human year equals 7 dog years?
And we should measure things in dog years. Maybe then, we’d recognize every precious moment for what it is. Sure, “What-ifs” are important. But our “right nows”: even more. Which is a lesson Barley – the nap loving pup – has been giving troubled owner Bobby for quite a while. Now in the golden age of his furry life, Barley’s still the best buddy Bobby’s ever had. And that’s a realization his human companion confirms, as they take a trip (and walk) down memory lane.
From the very first day they met, that trip’s been full of moments one shouldn’t forget. For instance:
That day in the cemetery Bobby drank whiskey near his mother’s grave. And encountered a then-puppy Barley… yet another desperate stray.
That time Bobby met his human soul mate besides a lake – while Barley romped with her poodle nearby.
The numerous nights Bobby pursued his passion for writing, and faithful Barley snoozed at his feet (rather than pursuing a tennis ball instead.)
And that time Bobby almost saw his journey end in a horrific car crash – if it hadn’t been for Barley slipping out the destroyed back window and finding help.
Yep: for Bobby Barley’s been there, every step. But now that journey’s nearing its end – because whether one walks on two feet or four, time eventually catches up to us all. Have you ever shared Life with a dog? If not, shame on you: go adopt one now, and don’t miss out!
But if you have: We GUARANTEE the message of this short will rip at your heartstrings and tear ducts. It’s real. It’s human. It’s everything that makes dog-life worthwhile. Much like the classics Where the Red Fern Grows and Old Yeller, Dog Years will suck you in (and lick your face) from the start. Short, sweet, and chock full of sentiment, Dog Years is paws down the most endearing story of man’s best friend that you’ll read in some time.
It’s like taking a long walk with a furry BFF. Bring this tale to the screen, and audiences will remember it’s ending for years (both human and dog) to come.