No Negotiation by Nadine - Short, Thriller, Heist, Crime. - Keith Turner, has held up a bank, taking people hostage and refusing a negotiator. 10 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Hi Nadine,

The format is out of whack.
Either get some free software (google search) or invest in screenwriting software (ex: Final Draft) if you're planning to write for a while.

You're not getting too many reads as the script is formatted, very hard to read.

I believe you have another script in this thread, "decay", same issue.

Good luck,
Frank

Screenwriting software.
https://www.scriptreaderpro.com/free-screenwriting-software/

Hey Nadine,

LC gave you a great link.

Try to get your script into the right format and I'll take a look at it.

I might have been a little bit short in my earlier response (sorry), not trying to discourage you, but with a correct format, it's so much easier to discuss and read the script. Also, read scripts, good way to learn.

Shoot me an e-mail when your next revision is posted, or I'll look for it.

Frank