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I think what also makes this tricky - as it pertains to the OWC - is that we, the readers, have only been given the first 10 pages of a feature.
To know how certain situations should play out is tricky, because there may be layers in each scene that are not revealed until after the 10th page.
To know why certain characters do what they do or say what they say may not be revealed until after the 10th page.
Especially if it's a script that has reveals throughout it (ex. thrillers). Not everything needs be revealed in the first 10 pages. The first 10 are there to grab the audience, let them know what they are going to watch and introduce them to some (not all, in some instances) of the major characters.
And also remember, that these are first drafts (for the most part) of the first 10 pages of a feature. These pages would be changed and changed again during re-writes.
To know how certain situations should play out is tricky, because there may be layers in each scene that are not revealed until after the 10th page.
To know why certain characters do what they do or say what they say may not be revealed until after the 10th page.
Especially if it's a script that has reveals throughout it (ex. thrillers). Not everything needs be revealed in the first 10 pages. The first 10 are there to grab the audience, let them know what they are going to watch and introduce them to some (not all, in some instances) of the major characters.
And also remember, that these are first drafts (for the most part) of the first 10 pages of a feature. These pages would be changed and changed again during re-writes.
I agree. I know, I peppered mine with hints of things to come, but there's no way anyone but me would know that after just the first ten.
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Hello I thought I need to write this, but didn't really know where. This is my first OWC and I am very grateful to everyone for posting feedback. I tried writing some feedback for several scripts, but quickly realized that the level of writers over here is way above mine, since I write for only six months or so There was not much I could really contribute. I enjoyed reading them all, though. There is always something to learn.
Hello I thought I need to write this, but didn't really know where. This is my first OWC and I am very grateful to everyone for posting feedback. I tried writing some feedback for several scripts, but quickly realized that the level of writers over here is way above mine, since I write for only six months or so There was not much I could really contribute. I enjoyed reading them all, though. There is always something to learn.
Congrats on finishing the OWC - this one was quite a challenge. It's also appreciative that you attempted posting some feedback. There are many amazing writers on here that not only post great scripts, but also post great feedback.
The only suggestion I have, is to continue reading, writing and reviewing - it's the greatest way to continue learning the craft.
Also - sometimes critisicm can be hard (and harsh), especially if you are a new writer. Just take it all in stride and learn to take things from each review that you believe will improve your writing and/or the story itself.
Vault man, never hold back your opinions. They are welcomed and useful, no less so because you are new. And at 6 months, you aren't new!
New writers often bring a purity to their reviews. They are uncontaminated by theory or rules. I love the opinions of new writers, I really do. It's great to have veteran perspective, but it's equally good to get the fresh insight.
Also - sometimes critisicm can be hard (and harsh), especially if you are a new writer. Just take it all in stride and learn to take things from each review that you believe will improve your writing and/or the story itself.
True, as I found out this week Seemed quite devastating at first, but now, I must say, I realize how much there was wrong with my writing and, probably, what to do next. The thing I wrote was very illustrative of what I usually write, so the critique was quite universal for me. As it turns out, what seems to be devastating critique can be very helpful.
New writers often bring a purity to their reviews. They are uncontaminated by theory or rules.
Thank you for your kind words, but I've had too much theory already and I might be too bent on following all that structure stuff Which is not bad, I guess, for a new writer. As far as I understood, it can make writing too mechanical, though. Everything has two sides to it
I wrote my first OWC a year ago. It was not the first thing I had ever written, but the first thing I had ever received feedback on, as I'd been only writing a couple of months.
You should have seen my format and writing. Among my many blunders, I had some dialogue blocks separated, like paragraphs. Who knew?
But I gave substantial reviews on every entry. I may have had little clue what a script was, I barely have one now, but I didn't hold back. People need feedback to get better.
Alright, I've read them all and I've looked them over again to make my personal selections.
I want to say that I actually found them all to have interesting qualities that made me once again appreciate the diversity here-- even Madam Laveau. Although, I made my points clear on the thread, there was a certain ability I detected, (if the writer pursues it) to work with indistinct dialogue that for me, would prove highly effective, IF, it's more rounded within the context. So despite any harshness by me on that thread, kudos for that.
Not really in order are the following:
For the best potential in Feature form and best concept:
PAGAN MAN
Even if I think this really is very very drafty material in terms of the way it should or might be constructed, I love it. Really, the name for me even implies a slightly comic tone, but only so much. If it was done right, it could really reach a large audience. As I said before, A single male in a coven of witches has GOT to have serious serious potential.
BLOOD ROOTS
Felt to me the best short in terms of my own personal taste because it had some base in reality with the prize for proof of supernatural power.
A WALK ON THE WICKED SIDE
This one surprised me as I was in the middle of a lot of reads and this one really excelled I thought in the way the Mobster met with the young, Alana, in the early portion of the story. I definitely think this one could be developed.
For me, the one that was not only the most memorable, but also the one that could be a short or a feature is:
WITCH'S FLAME
Not only do I love the title, but I just thought it had a real serious Pro feel to it.
Note that the imagery of her dancing in the forest was exceptional for me.
Also, I felt that it has a kind of flexible and neutral quality to it where you could play with the time and landscape and characters and still have a marvelous and rich film.
I have more to read and will get to them all by the beggining of the week. Work has kept me pretty busy and worn out. I do appreciate the time others have spent reading and commenting on my script. Cindy
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