Thanks for the read N7.

Cthulu are from the horror stories by Lovecraft. Sort a big evil tenticle space demon overlord thing.

And  the wacky one liners from old man I can't take credit for them cause they are in fact catch phrases from muppets from the muppet show.  

Muppets are cool.  

Not sure if I liked this one all that much. It was too self aware for a story that could've been a lot funnier. Angsty kids complaining about pain then embracing pain then saying things like "woe is me, woe is me" and "pain numbs the pain." Even the biggest posers don't talk like this. I wouldn't expect them to anyway. I think you'd be better off trying to figure out how these guys actually behave than merely parodying them. They're already melodramatic enough in real life. As of now, this is more parody than satire. I'm not sure which one you were going for but I think satire would have worked better.

Also, what was the deal with the old man? Strange fellow, to say the least. I'm pretty sure he's more than just bipolar.

Finally, I would say Cthulhu (BTW, Cthulhu is only one creature, not a kind of creature) is more suited for goths than emo kids and the characters you have here seem to be more goth than emo anyway, since we're talking stereotypes here. If you wanted to be really accurate, Cthulhu is most popular amongst literary folk and sci-fi dorks who read Terry Pratchett and watch Battlestar Galactica. But goths work well enough.

Anyway, bottom line, I'd try to make these characters a little more realistic. With stereotypes like goths and emo kids, it doesn't take much to go too far. Just a little bit is good enough.

Thanks for the read James.

Yeah you made a valid point. The Emo are a parody and sterotyical because to be honest, I've never met a Emo or seen one in real life. Do they exist? Or are they myth?

I came across the word emo a lot on internet and so Goggled it. Once I was enlightened on the subject I was so fascinated by the emo culture I just had to write about it. The Emo culture parodies itself.

Having seen a few several years ago in school, I can honestly say the "emo culture" is real, though they all seem to have converted to being "hardcore" lately.

That said, I've enjoyed making fun of emos for a long time and that's what hooked me into this story. The fake pain, the upper-middle class backgrounds, thinking they're being philosophical, even the bangs (which I think you mentioned with the main character) were spot on.

Two things though. First, my impression has generally been that emo kids cut themselves for attention, which would make me think the friends' scars would be more prominitely displayed (though I like the way it was done here). Also, I have no idea what a chtulu is and don't feel any more enlightened after reading everyone else's comments. I think it'd be funnier if instead, the woman at the end said a different name and when the man asked her what it was, she responded "I don't know, I made it up." The fact that he got suckered in by marketing something as unique would show that by trying to be different, he was still falling victim to consumerism. That or explain a little better what the chtulu is... maybe have Reedy reading the auction's description in the beginning?