Red 49 by John Stone - Short, Drama - A chance meeting leads to a twist of fate for a new driver and his passenger. 9 pages - pdf format

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This was bittersweet yet heartwarming all the same. I did find it odd that he left Charlie the way he did but I understand why you had the story end the way it did. The extra paragraphs would not have added to the feelings that the story was to invoke.

I think it ended well. It made me think over what George was going through.

Thanks for your comment’s guy’s. Just to fill you in and add some depth to the narrative I’ll explain who uncle Charlie is to me. He is the great uncle I had the pleasure of picking up when I worked at a cab company in Essex. At that time I was about to become a London Iconic taxi driver. Charlie was a retired taxi driver and was in fact a relative. I only found out when he died that he was my grandfather’s brother. I do own his gold watch, handed down to me because of the taxi connection. But just imagine my reaction to having met him when he was alive and not knowing who he was.

John -

Red 49 got to me, I thought it was good. I believe that a good writer can write about anything at anytime. It's not the length of the screenplay, but it's what your expressing to the world.

Frank J

  

Oh! Keeping in mind that the story is based on your personal life, I think my previous comment didn't seem valid then. All in all, I can say it is well-written and easy to follow.

Good luck.

Appreciated guy’s. Thanks for reading and comments.