Writer,

Another good one. I would’ve worked on that ending to have the figure/security guard in the scene, but hey, whatever. It still works good. Nice job.

Steve

Those are some ambitious crackheads to dig their father out of the grave for some gold crowns! Maybe the story would be better realized if the treasure was something more substantial. Although, pulling teeth from a dead person paints a pathetic picture so maybe you were on to something.

-Good job!

Too many plot holes for me.

So if he's buried in a casket, he has some money. Even the lower line models are a couple grand.

If the kids are his next of kin, chances are they'd be included on the burial plans.

So we have to believe that he had a wife or another child who was able to successfully keep away these two black sheep.

Guess I'm reading too much into this, but the point is that there was probably plenty of time for someone to remove his gold teeth before he was buried.

Cute idea, a little creepy - not sure it's plausible though. Have to think about the rating for this one.

Interesting.

I like it, nicely put together.  This has is more of a comedy crime caper.  But hey ho.  Good job.

Ok, where'd my post disappear to?

I was only brief...

I like it!

Needs a final reaction shot imh.

I can't add anything else.  Solid 4 from me.

Dan