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The Ballad of M. Night - 1+6WC (currently 3228 views) |
Don |
Posted: March 16th, 2013, 4:39pm |
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AdministratorAdministrator So, what are you writing?
LocationVirginia Posts16438 Posts Per Day 1.94 |
The Ballad of M. Night by James Fine - Thriller - After coming to terms with his dwindling fame, an infamous director, about to give up on life, accidentally receives a smart phone with Christopher Nolan's next film idea that has been rigged to success. 11 pages - pdf, format |
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crookedowl |
Posted: March 16th, 2013, 5:02pm |
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Eoin |
Posted: March 16th, 2013, 5:03pm |
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Been Around just another ego maniac with low self esteem
LocationIreland Posts638 Posts Per Day 0.12 |
This is "almost" a pisser. I#ll have to read the next 10 before I can submit a comment. |
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Reef Dreamer |
Posted: March 16th, 2013, 5:08pm |
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LocationThe Island of Jersey Posts2612 Posts Per Day 0.56 |
Pisser
Not interested.
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Andrew |
Posted: March 16th, 2013, 5:11pm |
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Old Timer
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Ahhhhh, man. That logline got me all excited - could've been a very funny and smart first 10 if the delivery wasn't so conceited. |
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AmbitionIsKey |
Posted: March 16th, 2013, 5:23pm |
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LocationBelfast, Ireland Posts363 Posts Per Day 0.09 |
Terrible. Which is a shame, because that log-line is golden.
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Toby_E |
Posted: March 16th, 2013, 5:52pm |
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LocationLondon, UK Posts872 Posts Per Day 0.15 |
Probably my favourite log-line I have actually read on this site. This could have been brilliant |
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RJ |
Posted: March 16th, 2013, 9:35pm |
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LocationAustralia Posts275 Posts Per Day 0.06 |
Well, um, didn't know whether you were really trying until - (dramatic pause).
This is a complete pisser. |
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nawazm11 |
Posted: March 16th, 2013, 10:58pm |
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This is a promising idea, if the writer can shoot me a PM, I might want to finish writing the script for the 7WC - only if I have time though. I think in the middle of all the bullshit happening on screen, there are some golden nuggets here. I hate to admit it but I did laugh a few times. I can't really say this is a pisser. After I finished it, my reaction was more like, the hell did I just read? It just seems like you stuffed your thoughts into the script rather than try and make it funny. But like I said, there are still some funny bits in there. The Rob Schneider thing, the Black Swan lesbian reference with the deliveryman (which is a hard one to catch). Even the Batman Scene. But my favourite one is definitely the Penis Valley, Pencilvagina line. You legit won't believe how long I laughed at that. It was subtle but a little digging found that you actually meant Penn Valley, Pennsylvania. For some odd reason, I could not stop laughing at that. Looking back into the prophecy OWC, this definitely isn't the same James Fine as before. There were some subtle jokes stuffed in there, I'm not sure what to this of it. It's a piss poor effort, even for a pisser it didn't feel like it was as funny as it could've been. Again, PM me, man/woman! |
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Grandma Bear |
Posted: March 17th, 2013, 1:02am |
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LocationThe Swamp... Posts7962 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
Okay, so I sat down to read one of these before going to bed. I didn't recognize the writer's name, but the OWCs are open for everyone. I was intrigued by the logline, but after opening the script, I got very disappointed. To be honest, I think I'm already done reading these first 10 submissions and I will wait for the full feature submissions. |
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Posted: March 17th, 2013, 1:30am |
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Quoted from crookedowl Two thumbs up!! |
Hahahaha. I think it's hilarious. You gotta love a script that starts with "The water shoots down from the nozzle faster than semen shooting out of a pornstar." I found myself with a huge grin on my face pretty much the whole time after that. I doubt we'll see this make the 6WC, though. If the writer can come up with another 80-90 pages of this shit, I'll be very surprised. I mean, I know these first 10 pages are garbage... but it makes me laugh. I wanna see more. |
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Posted: March 17th, 2013, 2:15pm |
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January Project Group There`s too much blood in my alcohol
LocationUpstate New York Posts1865 Posts Per Day 0.36 |
Holy crapfest Mark |
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LC |
Posted: March 17th, 2013, 7:06pm |
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LocationThe Great Southern Land Posts7630 Posts Per Day 1.34 |
Sorry, I couldn't get through this. Too tedious. You shouldn't really be offended though, it is what it is. |
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Forgive |
Posted: March 17th, 2013, 8:48pm |
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Old Timer Let The Sky Fall
LocationVarious, exotic. Posts1373 Posts Per Day 0.27 |
Utter crap. A clever pisser can only be written by someone who knows their stuff. This is written by a blockhead. |
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Blakkwolfe |
Posted: March 17th, 2013, 9:34pm |
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LocationFlorida, USA Posts706 Posts Per Day 0.12 |
Script does to M.Knight what he did to Aang, Katara and Zuko in the tragic "Last Airbender..." He had it coming. A karmic Agni Kai, as it were. |
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Sandra Elstree. |
Posted: March 19th, 2013, 10:45am |
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Of The Ancients What if the Hokey Pokey, IS what it's all about?
LocationBowden, Alberta Posts3664 Posts Per Day 0.60 |
I got a kick out of the title page and could see from the start you were just having fun.
Poor M. Night.
Nevertheless, you have brought a light and crazy heart to the challenge.
Sandra
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Pale Yellow |
Posted: March 20th, 2013, 3:46pm |
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January Project Group
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Sorry. I can't get past page one. |
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