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I had a really hard time with this script, I thought it turned into a bit of mess halfway through.
I get what you were trying to do, you wanted to put all these awesome characters together: Spiderman, Terminator, John McClane, Ethan Hunt...
...but it didn't quite come together, at least not for me. If there was more of a direct plot I'd be more inclined to give it praise but it all seemed like a random sequence of events with no connection to anything.
Another story, which perhaps, could've been set outside an elevator and had more success.
For me, this one was far too over-the-top and outlandish to work. Some of the writing came across as clunky, IMO. (As another reader mentioned earlier - "the kid gives a bit place to him"?) Also, how old is this kid supposed to be? He's only four foot - which implies very young - and he's commenting that the costume rides up in the crotch?
As for the overall story... it was too crazy to hold my interest. I give you points for throwing in everything except (and maybe including) the kitchen sink. But this one... just not for me.
Still... lots of creativity here. And that certainly counts for something!
I thought the elevator hatch was gonna reveal the faceless Hannibal Lector victim from Silence Of The Lambs.
Anyway, nice try here but I don't think you got it quite right regarding your formatting and, to a lesser degree, your story. I take it your new to this, it maybe not. But this does read like you're in the early stages of screenwriting. Brush up on your format, read some scripts around here, and some pro scripts and you'll get the hang of it, I'm sure.
The story was cute, but it didn't have teeth. As one commenter said, you gave us the reveal but then kept going. And who Ethan Hunt is is totally beyond me. I'm guessing its an age thing with me. Not your fault there. Best of luck in the future, friend.