Quoted from Sanderson Was the house floating above the ground? If so that was a cool idea.

No, the idea was that the house had two giant bony legs that resembled bird's feet (chicken) under the cover of darkness. It was a last minute addition to the draft; I felt I needed the reveal due to the folklore surrounding the Baba Yaga character. It's like if someone did a story on another Baba named Ali and needed the flying carpet. Something like that.

Then again, a floating house might solve something in rewrite...unless it's animated- because that would open up the next can of tuna, and...you know someone's gonna blurt out "Up".

Quoted from Sanderson like the bouncing jack'o lantern, it's like a  Miyazaki character

Why, thank you! That's one of the best comments I got regarding the OWC. "Castle In The Sky" and "Spirited Away" were not influences on the work but still, I think that's a high compliment.
Thanks for the read.

You too Cooldsnap.

Hey, great effort on the work.

I had never heard of this folk character either, but liked the way you threw your own spin on it. Everything was beautifully described and found myself enjoying it until the end.

Not sure about the lightning shining through the room even though it had no doors or windows?

Apart from that I thought it was a good effort, definetly one of the better OWC i've read.

Del

Quoted from Delboy Hey, great effort on the work. I had never heard of this folk character either, but liked the way you threw your own spin on it. Everything was beautifully described and found myself enjoying it until the end. Not sure about the lightning shining through the room even though it had no doors or windows? Apart from that I thought it was a good effort, definetly one of the better OWC i've read. Del

Thanks for the read, Del. There are two answers to your question in the script regarding the lightning in the room.

Quoted Text The house has several exposed rotten wood beams, it is a complete unseen miracle on how the place still stands without caving in. He glances down to the floor. His eyes go wide. The floor: loose boards and rusted nails. He sees the ground through the cracks. Mud drizzles down into dead trees as the house rises up like an elevator.

The second, of course, is Baba Yaga herself:

Quoted Text Baba Yaga storms up to him, her footsteps in synchronization with lightning flashes.

In other words, a possible hocus-pocus moment. You know, like "Hellraiser"- when someone fools with that eviil puzzle, that underworld light sesps through walls and cracks, but there's no reasonable light source other than the supernatural?

In any case, as I'm rewriting this, I'll consider giving it another look.

Thanks again
-DjS

That was friggin' trippy man.  I have no idea what I just read.  I don't know if it was meant to be funny, or metaphysical, or whatever.  I do know that it was extremely engaging and that I applaud you for having the balls to write a story with such a level of oddity.

Some of your sentences were clumsy however; another rewrite may be in order.  I agree with the other posters: you write well visually.  It's just that it can sometimes be hard to understand what's actually happening.