Quoted from MarkRenshaw As for the challenge it fits the parameters (apart from using Thor, -Mark

The way I read it - there wasn't a prohibition against using existing Superheroes - the protag had to me a brand new one. e.g., from the guidelines - "This week, you're going to tell your own superhero story. This isn't some redux of a previously existing character (although I won't rule out cameos by rich billionaires in bat suits..."


So - I am okay with Thor.  

In terms of the story itself - Well written/formatted etc - but not really my type of humor - i.e., I didn't laugh. Part of that may be - from the title - you know what is coming and a healthy part of humor is the chuckle you get from being surprised by a line or a reaction.

I think this one will be a split from some folks since the structure is sound - some will find it funny and some will not.

Got potential but didn't land most of it, IMO

Felt rushed, but many will be that way.

I would spend a little longer in therapy to set them up and gives the likes of Thor a phobia or such tick that would cause him to fear sex, in other words something to clash with the task in hand. Wasn't keen on the mayor.

As it all takes place in a room, if tidied up etc this would be filmable

Superheroes in therapy for sex addiction, okay I'll go with it... but it then sort of meanders with a lot of talking... nd then the 'action' is actually all off-screen...

Sorry didn't work for me.

I knew the comments on this one were gonna be funny, not disappointed.

The angle of this script has potential and is to my taste, the villain (Nyms) is a clever invention. I just wish there were more funny stuff in it, sorry, just my opin.

Not in my wheel house.  didn't find it all that funny or clever.  But that's me.

Superheroes and porn… good concept, execution does not work for my taste.

Well this humor definitely appeals to my, err, senses. However it fell a bit flat for me.

Also, weren't most, if not all, of these superheroes pre-existing? There's Thor (obviously), Beast Boy (Teen Titans), and Cock Knocker (Bluntman and Chronic/Jay and Silent Bob). But whatever, I wouldn't disqualify it because of that.

Not a bad effort. Just felt a bit rushed. There was almost too much being thrown into the mix and it was easy to get lost in the innuendos.

Fun entry overall.

Quick, easy read if not predictable. Characters are quick sketches, but effective: the names give a good enough mental picture to know who we are dealing with.  Could have used a bit more conflict and showing or at least implying the action instead of reporting it after the fact...even in snappy vignettes for sake of length...Enjoyed it though...

Points on brevity, but not for me. The idea's not bad but is pretty much squandered. Altered Egos did a better job with the same idea, and even that one I felt didn't go far enough with it. That aside, the jokes were lazy, and the whole thing felt super aimless and slapped together in haste. Not much else to say.

OK, finally getting a chance to curl up to a OWC. What do I get? Sex therapy.

Not a bad idea, but this was a talkie.  I wanted a little hand sex or something. With all those supposed nympths running about, I wanted to see something happen.  And as a cherry on the cream, I wanted that damn Mayor to get her bum-uppence.

This one felt like quickie A little light on the action, but not awful. Next.

This one does not deliver. Seems as though the writer hasn't tried very hard with this one. I get what you're going for, I just feel that it misses the mark. Well written.

This one felt a little thrown together. I think the characters are the best thing it has going for it. I enjoyed the absurdity of Thor being the only known hero thrown into a group of sex freaks. But what little story there was, was rushed through and the comedy suffered as a result. A longer, more thought out piece might give these characters the space they need to really work.