I don't even like horror and I could still appreciate what a great job you did on this short.

The compostion of the shots was very impressive, it was visually very stylish.

Do we all have to review everything on this website? Why can't everyone just enjoy the short film for what it is? worts and all.

Hey Sean,

Nicely done.  I read the script and I thought the cuts you made were effective.  The ending worked quite well.  What's your next project?

Michael

Sean,

Terrific work, man! Very well made. Got a couple of good jumps out of it.

Can't wait to see what you come up with next.

Morgan, thanks. I know what you mean when it comes to bringing a script to life. I had all these shots in my head on how to shoot the scene, and then when I tried it just didn't work out the way I wanted it to so I had to change it up. Glad you jumped.

Tonkatough, glad you liked it. Ha ha, I don't mind the mistakes that were pointed out during the film. It helps along with learning how to shoot a better film, just like reviewing scripts on here and pointing out the mistakes helps you learn how to write a better script.

Michael, I don't have a next project right now (or at least outside of school). Though, inside of school, we're going to be shooting parts of a music video and practice with stop animation.

Chism, yet again, I'm glad I scared people. I love it when people jump during movies because I get more enjoyment out of watching people get scared than watching the movie.

Sean

Okay, I just got around to this, and I have to ask...

Did the fish do it?  His eyes looked kinda shifty to me.

I really can't go on about any technical stuff, because I ultimately don't know what the hell I'm talking about in that regard unless something is blatantly obvious.  Nothing here struck me that way, so I guess you're in good shape.

Anyway, some good startle scares in here, and I enjoyed it.  Nice job.

Pretty neat, Sean.

I laughed at  the fish (a complement) cos it was unexpected even though I read the script. (It has been awhile) I do remember the final scene. It was bad ass too.

So I have to ask...

Are you going to turn this one into a feature???

It could be an easy thing to do... show the killer... the why of it... what led up to it... if it ended or just went on somewhere else...

I ask because I would like to see it and I know you can do it.

Good job,
Cindy

Shelton, how'd you know? I thought I hid the fact that the fish was the suspect the whole time pretty well! You must have a knack for finding stuff like that! Thanks for watching.

Cindy, you laughed?? LAUGHED??? That is an insult to me! Just kidding, glad you liked it. I'm not so sure about a sequel or making it full length. I don't really  have an idea on how I can continue it, and I still need to create the idea that it's either something paranormal or an actual person-killer...or both!


Sean

Sean,

I go to Haunted houses at Halloween and laugh while others scream.
It's the unexpected... and I can't scream, never could...

As for making this into a feature, all you have to do is build more mystery about what happened, maybe it is YOU who is the real killer???
Kill more people...
Reveal the killer. Maybe he has two sides to his personality... ???
then come up with the ending... Is he killed, jailed... or no one ever finds him out...

I think it would be cool.

Hey Sean,

That pretty good dood, some honest to God scares there. Well done. I thought it could have been a bit shorter though (or thighter) and maybe normalize the audio, some of it was too low and some of it to loud.

I loved how the dog just slept on this floor while Jenna starts to get freaked out.

Solid!

Cheers
Rob

Not bad, dude. Some nice shots and an impressive soundtrack for such a low key project. The sound is a little problematic, especially from shot to shot. There's lots of things you could do about that though (filters, crossfades, etc.). The fish was the best part, even if you weren't supposed to laugh. Good job!

Cindy, I don't scream either. I laugh at everyone else's fear and they get mad at me for it, but I can't help it! Though, the last time I screamed at a horror movie was just a few months ago when I was watching [REC] on the computer! I even had my eyes covered (!) and when the thing I knew was going to pop out popped out, I screamed. I was so embarrassed. Ha ha. But any way, if people REALLY want me to write a sequel or feature or whatever, I can try and squeeze one out and try and make it work...

Sniper, yep, I've taken note of the "tighter editing" situation. And I'd like to get a boom mic if I could find a cheap one (and if I filmed stuff more often, I don't really do it much outside of school). And that's Daisy. She's really fat and lazy and I realized she was just laying there while Jenna was all freaked out! Ha ha ha I love that dog...

James, glad you enjoyed it. I don't really like having cross-fades or dissolves between scenes because it feels too...story-ish, like they're chapters rather than scenes, so I try and stray from them. But I'll be practicing on the sound more. And the fish part seems to be getting a lot of people! He he he


Sean

Quoted from Zombie Sean But any way, if people REALLY want me to write a sequel or feature or whatever, I can try and squeeze one out and try and make it work... Sean

Good.

I think it would be cool.
And it would be more "practice" for you (as you say).

I'll be waiting to see it.

Cindy

i hope all this positivity encourages you to do a feature, i think this short would make a good opening scene, scream style! i need to get making shorts for my university portfolio gahhh but this is inspiring to get off my bumm

Cindy, I'll think about it. I have some ideas for another feature script and a short script so I don't want to have too much on my plate. And wouldn't plan on filming it either.......I don't do features. Too long. Too much memory on my computer

Kev, I would recommend you get off your "bumm." Filming stuff is tedious work, but I think it's a lot of fun! Especially when you sit down and start editing, and you're the first to actually see the work unfold.

Sean

Hey Sean, this was pretty well made.  You really did a good job of incorporating sound into the horror.  It kind of reminded me of what M. Night Shymalamaladingdong did with "Signs".  Acting was eh, but the production values were off the hook.  Very nice, my friend!