Ha! Sandra, you're crazy...in a good way!
Never lose your spirit!
In a good and a bad way I'm afraid to say.
Yachad, (Together) in craziness.
First off, I want to say that I just read this to the end and without any vodka or the like in my system and you know what?
People might think I'm crazy and they may be right, but Jeff, this is one of the most creative things I've read from you.
Ignoring all the rules, I feel like you've just stripped off your clothes and danced naked in the moonlight.
Because I know you, (in a weird way) I can feel your personna coming through in this and I really enjoy it.
When the wolf says,
(licking his lips
with his tongue))
I'm gonna kill both your ugly asses,
bitches. But first, I'm gonna get
shitfaced and you two fucks are gonna
pay for all my pints.
This is excellent. We're completely outside of the traditional antagonist/protagonist mode and THE WOLF is as if right between and gonna kill 'em both if they don't snap out of it!
I really enjoyed this, reading this-- reading it very slowly and extracting all of the juice.
You've brightened my day.
Now, (akshav) regarding my working on the rewrite Thief script, I will approach it again after I see Gary's rewrite. He might bring it back around to the original vision, but if not, there will be Thief - Above and Below or something like that.
I studied a lot of the craft while re-writing the last version and hopefully, with some more time, I can re-write the re-write again.