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Went back and gave this another read since it did so well. Definitely good work. Not sure why it didn't grab me the first time. It's one of those ones I gave a pretty good review, but then every time I looked back at the title, I couldn't remember anything about it. That's not necessarily bad. Sometimes I remember the stories that had something ridiculous in them, like the scorpion in the omellete. This one didn't have anything bad enough in it to remember.
I think the one reason the story didn't connect with me was the ending sequence. I'm not a fan of these stories where ghosts kind of just shows up at the end, immensely and inexplicably powerful ghosts that save the day. There were a lot of these in this OWC. I tend to think ghosts don't have much power in this world. Their connection is more to our minds than to the physical plane. Kind of like in the film Ghost, where it takes immense effort on their part to do something physical in this world. Otherwise, we'd see them driving cars and drinking in bars!
I did give this a 'consider' in my vote, but in hindsight, maybe I should have rated it higher. Certainly it was perfectly crafted to attract Iscripts, as the writing is appealing and there are only 4 characters. Some of the other top vote getters would have been much harder to do. Hindsight is 20/20, but from that perspective this does look like the obvious choice for winner... I mean, selection. Nice Job!