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jwent6688
Posted: October 23rd, 2011, 9:14am Report to Moderator
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Well, I'm guilty as Kevin then. I shot my mouth off about my favorite. to be honest, didn't see how it could offend anyone, and I certainly wasn't trying to lobby votes for its author, whom I do not know.

In hindsight, I guess maybe it could bother some people. This is the first time we've ever had this voting system in place. I just thought it was cool with the pass, consider, recommend aspect this time.

As far as guesses for others, I know many of the authors, so i didn't even put it out there. Almost feel like I'm outting them that way.

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c m hall
Posted: October 23rd, 2011, 9:23am Report to Moderator
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quote leitskev -
If a story is unclear because the writer is confused, that's one thing. For example, Falling Angels. The young girl mentions to the priest "what have we done? The Lord seeks vengeance for our sins." But then later the girl is portrayed as your standard innocent virgin. end quote leitskev

Here's another interpretation...
I read the "What have we done? The Lord seeks vengeance for our sins.  I heard his servants, evil ghosts..." lines as a sign of the girl's despair and confusion; she's in shock after seeing her family killed and she's trying to understand what seems to be the Lord seeking vengeance against humanity, a thing that has no place in Christianity, so she's trying to do the impossible and she knows it --

she must have had strong Faith before her family is killed because she still can't think beyond it,  the "we" in "what have we done?" is "we humans" at war, we've opened the gates to hell...

So, considering the circumstances of the girl's life, I think there's no reason to suspect that she's confessing to any particular sin, other than being a member of humanity.

Just my two cents, because I really loved this script.
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leitskev
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Not campaigning for or against any scripts. Merely talking about scripts I like and WHY I like them. To me, that's a proper part of analysis, and an important way of learning what works and doesn't in shorts. It won't influence anyone's vote. Also, I do avoid talking about scripts whose author I know or find out about during the course of things.

Trying to bring a little color to reviews as well. Some like that, some don't. Makes it more interesting for me. People can killfile me if they don;t like the reviews.
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Dreamscale
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I don't mean to cause trouble...I really don't.

My point is simple - if you want to throw out the name of some scripts you like, go for it, but that should be it, IMO.

Here, Kevin is literally piting 1 script up against another, and IMO, that shouldn't be done.


To ski or not to ski...that's not even a question.

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Reef Dreamer
Posted: October 23rd, 2011, 1:08pm Report to Moderator
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The scripts have been up over a week and most have 20-24 reviews from 38 scripts posted.

When you look at the reviews a handful come from regulars who have not even entered ( we think!)

I suppose not everyone can read them all and  I presume there were some new entrants who may feel un able to post reviews.

Is this ratio about right for previous OWC's?


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The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville
Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final
Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards.  Third - Honolulu
Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place
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greg
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Quoted from Reef Dreamer
The scripts have been up over a week and most have 20-24 reviews from 38 scripts posted.

When you look at the reviews a handful come from regulars who have not even entered ( we think!)

I suppose not everyone can read them all and  I presume there were some new entrants who may feel un able to post reviews.

Is this ratio about right for previous OWC's?


At the moment it's 24.3 posts per script, which is a normal average, though the ratio may be a bit low.

For comparison sake, I pulled a Ray and calculated the last few OWC averages:

September - 30 scripts, 29.8 posts per
June - 16 scripts, 20.3 posts per
February - 33 scripts, 32 posts per
October 10 - 43 scripts, 26.8 posts per
May 10 - 28 scripts, 22.6 posts per

Interpret those figures as you will.  You take the total number of posts for the challenge (seen on the main board), subtract all non-script thread posts (figures seen on the OWC board), then divide that number by total number of scripts.  With more scripts there tends to be a larger range between the total number and the average as seen in last October's.  

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leitskev
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C M Hall(sorry, not sure of your name)

Excellent point, and it could be that she is referring to general sins of humanity that have led to such destruction. I still think there are perhaps times when this script is a little unclear which direction it wants to go, but we've all done that, especially when rushing against a deadline.

Jeff, when I put two scripts up against each other for my championship contenders, it was a complement to them both. Two excellent scripts that stood tall for me. And this was a way for me to have a little fun with it. IMO Open Casket is professional quality, Last Stop has magical originality. Both scripts represent this challenge extremely well. Last Stop did not get as many reads, so I wanted to make sure people were aware of it. And again, absolutely no idea who wrote it or even if they're around.

Personally, if you disagree with a review, I would avoid reacting with "what is this world coming to". "Crazy" is also an adjective to approach with caution.
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Electric Dreamer
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Quoted from Reef Dreamer

When you look at the reviews a handful come from regulars who have not even entered ( we think!)


Since we're going there, I fit into this category.
If that helps with the statistics at all.

E.D.


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DarrenJamesSeeley
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Answers to today's mind boggling questions:

What's this world coming to?
No, the world has long since been there. If it did change again, aside from Armegeddon, nobody would notice.  

Would  people enjoy Paul Bart Mall Cop if it was a horror film?
No. It already was.  



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Reef Dreamer
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Favourite scenes.

With 38 scripts I have already forgotten a fair amount yet it has been great to tuck into many different ideas.

I just wondered what everyone's favourite scenes were. It doesn't mean you thought them the best but with so much on offer there are things to remember.

I don't have my note pad to hand but remember the following ;

Ghosts playing cards.

A dining table debating a re occurring ghost.

A hall of mirrors with a dwarf nearby

An eight foot man with axe

Parachutes descending onto a graveyard

A mobile phone showing where the spirits are

A deformed manservant with his pretty ladies

Oh and who could forget a girl offering her cotton candy to a man!


What are yours?


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The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville
Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final
Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards.  Third - Honolulu
Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place
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Quoted from Reef Dreamer


What are yours?



Since you asked, I think the only scene I'll really remember from this OWC will be the house choking the wife with curtains, and then the other guy saves the day by giving the house a rubdown.
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Pete B. Lane
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I haven't had tons of time to read and review this week, so I'm catching up on as many OWC scripts today and tomorrow as I can. I won't get to them all, but I'm aiming for 15 or so. I want the comments I give to at least equal the number of comments I got.
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Ledbetter
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Great job thinking of the "ONE TIME DROP" of all of the submissions.

Readers get to go through all of them at their pace to determine what is worth reading.

It raises an interesting question as to whether the first post helped to get momentum on a particular script or whether fresh minds prevailed.

There was no “Oh God, not another 10 scripts to read".

No burnout around the final turn.

With all scripts on the table, don't you think this truly levels the playing field?

Great idea Don; I think it was mentioned by Jeff and possibly some others posters on this concept.

It seems that even water was found as the scripts fleshed themselves out over the course of time.

To all, GREAT JOB on this OWC submission.

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Sandra Elstree.
Posted: October 23rd, 2011, 10:50pm Report to Moderator
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Quoted from Ledbetter
Great job thinking of the "ONE TIME DROP" of all of the submissions.



I agree with the "One Time Drop". It's a very good idea and it keeps all of the scripts on a level playing field, since "Reader Burnout" happens no matter how hard you try and give each script equal time.

One thing I've noticed (and I think it's just human nature) is that if one person happens to make a certain comment, others will follow suit if they happen to read the comments. That's why I used to NOT do that, but I have recently stopped that practice in every case because sometimes I feel like I need help because I feel like I'm a blind man in a dark room at times. When I feel that way, I will sometimes allow myself to read others feedback. When this happens, sometimes it's "Yeah, I felt that way too", but other times it's "Holy macro! I feel completely different!" So that raises an important point: Writers must be very discerning in how they interpret the crits because each critique artist is going to take your script in a little bit of a different direction.

As a writer and artist, you need to determine where you want to go with any script. A little thing can make a huge difference; so remain true to yourself despite what is "Our Noise".

On the memorable images:

I'll post more on this later but A Price to Pay had me when Jennifer kept returning to the old stain and the thrice closing of the lock. To me it was excellent and this script's visuals held strong in my memory. It was one of the reasons I placed it in my top three. What I'm thinking now is that it needs something in the title that will catch us more and be more memorable because I really do think it was a very good script.

Sandra



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I think it's good when people choose to repeat comments.  That gives you an idea of what really bothers people and isn't just someones pet peeve.  
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