I have finished the script.

I like tha part where Max kill person, he see all dead person memoery flash before die.

This is good, but what I feel drags it down a bit is the exposition dialouge. Way to much people stand around and explain stuff. very dull. Show the emotional impact the situation have on characters rather then just have character explain the situation that involved them.

The plot structure is little out of whack to. No introduction of characters. The falsh backs are intrusive, and story not have any conflict or drama.  You need to study some books or artilces on story structure. The flash backs took me out of the story, slowed it down and annoyed me. Better off with out the flash back.  

Concentrate on these area of your writing. They need the most improvement.

But other then that this was a good effort and look forward to your next script.

Oh yeah I noticed the current website you have your script on. My God that's a lot of scripts. There must have been over a hundred of them. Some many scripts written, so few studios.

Good idea coming here to Simply Scripts. At least here the scripts are catogorized into diffrent genre ao make it easier for readers to find what interest them. Plus the review system that ensure that how many scripts you read depend on how much you read.  Much better then have all the scripts clumped together on 60 pages.