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Hate by Andrew Herlan - Action, Adventure - A young, naive racist Jim, 20, is hid out in South Central by a black FBI agent where Jim must face down his prejudice and defeat dangerous racial terrorists before 150 people are killed. 136 pages - pdf, format
136 pages is a bunch. I read the first few, up to Jim at the cop shop. There's a lot you could cut down. Right now I'm not up for laboring through that many pages.
150 people killed...oddly specific. Anyway, onto the script.
"The California Highway Desert" Should be a SUPER or so I would think since it's capped and all alone.
Four thick paragraphs sum up a racist party in the desert. The detail you put in this opening scene seems a bit too much. A few lines leading up to this "generator party" as I know them (minus the nazi influence) is sufficient.
You jump to a new scene and this one, unlike the opening, has no description to it. Not even a time in the slug. A new character shows up which makes six characters introduced within two pages.
I'll end it there. Hopefully you'll chime in and shed some light.