Quoted from bert This is not supposed to be a collection of reviews.  It is just readers talking about different aspects of the story or characters. But we will just have to see how it evolves, you know? And yes -- the discussion (NOT the script) will be getting it's own thread.  Probably on your Screenwriting board, George.

That'll work. Maybe we can learn a thing or two out of it, and even justify or debunk much of the other discussion that spawned this one. My later reviewing style has been more like a discussion of the script as opposed to ticking off page numbers. I'm sure we'll get the hang of it as we go along. Hopefully it will be useful to not only the author but teach a thing or two outside of just the script itself.

If we can stick to the academic aspects of the writing process while discussing the script and follow the "why's", I can see how we all might get something out of it.

I'd like to make a suggestion for a future discussion:

George Wilson's Fempiror Chronicles.

For several reasons...

1. It's a good, solid story structure and will be worthwhile debating.

2. George has spent so much energy on the series that it would be good to help to get the first, crucial, script as tight as is humanly possible.

3. I saw that George was complaining on the "Rules" thread about not getting through to agents and such and I thought it would be a good starting place to discuss the business aspects of scripts.

(I'm Rick aka Decadence Films btw, login in seems to have stopped working on that account)

Hey,

I think this is a fabulous idea! I always prefer that authors respond to reviews and there is a little back and forth. I think that's where the best insights come from. This is deffinitly a good way to facilitate that kind of discourse. Great idea, whoever came up with it.  

Given that I have the time, (I may or may not, don't know yet) I'm in.

Quoted from bert You may be right, but at the same time, it would be kind of an artificial direction.  I was kind of thinking the author should see what kind of thoughts arise organically from the participants.  If the author directs the flow of conversation, some really good ideas might never even arise.  Does that make sense?

I agree that the author should be excluded at the beginning, but after discussion dies down I would definitely like to see them respond.

Also, while I don't think the author should be doing it, I do think there should be some kind of "moderator" that can give the discussion some direction. To bring us back to interesting things that kind of get left behind or hidden in the clutter, or if people really go off topic, or end up in pointless/tedious debates... stuff like that. I don't think they should be dictating the topic or anything like that, I would prefer organic too, but I think some authority could be useful.

Quoted from bert This is just an experiment to see if we can turn the discussion back towards feature script once in a while.  At least a little.

I like to think there's room for both. Just my opinion... But I also see where you're coming from.


sheepwalker

OK, nobody else has piped up, so we will assume that Mike is a good choice and everybody is just waiting for somebody to say “go”.  So I will do that.

Quoted from ScarTissue George Wilson's Fempiror Chronicles

While this idea is primarily aimed at newer scripts, with few readers and/or comments, it may be equally instructive to include some of the dinosaurs around here that have lots of reads and have been fairly well polished by reader feedback.  And I am not just saying this because I have one of those, too haha.

But -- like I have said -- we will make plans for future script clubs based on the performance of this first one.

The inaugural thread can be found here:

http://www.simplyscripts.com/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?m-1212793041/

It's been mentioned that we shouldn't be discussing "unfilmables".  Could somebody kindly clarify for me what is meant by that?

Thanks.

Quoted from escapist II It's been mentioned that we shouldn't be discussing "unfilmables".  Could somebody kindly clarify for me what is meant by that? Thanks.

That was kind of a sarcastic jab at the "Breaking the Rules" thread.

For example:

Quoted from The Clean Up Crew CHRIS CHAN (27), an Oriental with close-cropped hair and a“can-do” attitude. He’s a frustrated young man, a frustrated basketball player, and a frustrated clean-up guy

The first person to ask, "But how do we KNOW he is a frustrated basketball player?" will be slapped with mousepads.

That is the kind of minutia we are not interested in talking about.

Sounds like a good idea.


Phil

Quoted from bert Talk to Pia.  She's the boss this time.  I have not got the time to run one of these right now.

Okay,

the conversation regarding the next script will continue here until we have a new script chosen then there will be a new thread started on the screenwriting board.
I'm the boss you hear so pay attention or I'll get my bull whip out!!  

It seems that there might be enough people interested in this so lets give it another shot.  

I wouldn't mind doing dreamscale's script next, but I personally would like to give James new script a good discussion first.... if he goes along with it. I have to ask him first, but he probably wouldn't mind.

As with the first script, this isn't so much about giving a review, but more about the very specifics of plot, characterization, transitions, dialogue and so on.

I also would like to point out that anyone who participates will have a greater chance of seeing their own script discuss later on.  

Quoted from Grandma Bear I wouldn't mind doing dreamscale's script next, but I personally would like to give James new script a good discussion first.... if he goes along with it. I have to ask him first, but he probably wouldn't mind.

Since Dreamscale's script isn't up yet, I would suggest going with James', and then earmarking the next to Dreamscale.  That will help keep things rolling along, I think.

Okay, James has given us the go ahead.

Any reviews of his scripts can be posted in the script thread here. The Script Club discussion of the script should be here

Happy reading people and lets get serious about the craft of screenwriting.  

OK, which script are we doing?  Where do I find it?

Quoted from Dreamscale OK, which script are we doing?  Where do I find it?

http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?m-1216949762/

Thanks!  I just came across it in the Script Club.  I'm on it and will post my thoughts later today.

Whoa ponies.... That was close! I got the reins back before they lazily trotted off into that alfalfa field.

Okay Dreamscale... yours is up next. Submit it ASAP to Don and we'll get crackin'. The only bad part is that you can't participate...
What is the title and genre anyway?

How'd we get back to Script Club?  I think Script Club II thread is still open as of now.  You must have followed the link Bert just entered, huh?

Title is "Fade to White".  genre is horror, although it crosses into other genres as well.

How do I submit it and how do we get Script Club III going?

Bert?  Are you willing to lead the horses out of the alfalfa fields and back into the open range?