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Showdown #4 Ryan vs ?? - NAMING (currently 3907 views) |
mcornetto |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 3:51am |
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Okies.... I think you can guess now if you want. |
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rc1107 |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 7:34am |
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LocationYoungstown Posts1241 Posts Per Day 0.20 |
I went with A. It was written okay and had a pretty good twist. But most of all, I followed the whole story.
B was ehh. Don't really understand how the president taking a bullet would make everybody all of a sudden put their mask on. Maybe I missed something. (I do find it interesting how both A and B went with a widespread virus panic though, considering the logline just mentioned an isolated rape.)
C was hard to read and didn't really make sense. I mean, I understood what happened, but it still didn't make sense, logically. |
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Electric Dreamer |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 10:04am |
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LocationLos Angeles Posts2740 Posts Per Day 0.55 |
A - Clear narrative, inventive environment & twist on the logline for bonus points.
B - Solid opener, tacked on rape correlation & ineffectual end. Not bad effort.
C - Too many characters, muddled motivators & solid formatting. Didn't get it.
E.D. |
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khamanna |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 11:57am |
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I think A is Ryan B - can't say C - maybe Hugh Hoyland (mere observation, because of the God.. tattoo) |
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Dreamscale |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 4:21pm |
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My guess is that A is the winner... |
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greg |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 4:36pm |
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Old Timer Oh Hi
LocationSan Diego, California Posts1680 Posts Per Day 0.24 |
I think Ryan is B. |
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Dreamscale |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 4:58pm |
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I think Sandra wrote all 3 of them! |
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Sandra Elstree. |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 5:12pm |
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Of The Ancients What if the Hokey Pokey, IS what it's all about?
LocationBowden, Alberta Posts3664 Posts Per Day 0.60 |
Quoted from Dreamscale I think Sandra wrote all 3 of them! |
Quit jokin' around Jeffster I do like to study different kinds of writing though, even if the brand isn't my cup of tea. Did I ever tell you my mushroom story? No? Ah well... later. Remind me. Who did A? Sandra |
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Dreamscale |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 5:32pm |
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Ahhhh...Mushrooms...my fave!!!!! |
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leitskev |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 5:45pm |
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Writing and mushrooms. Hmmm. |
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mcornetto |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 6:18pm |
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Well, we already know that A will continue on. Would you like me to name names now? |
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mcornetto |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 7:25pm |
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I can only take the silence as a yes.
Ryan wrote script A. Once again he continues on... Who will challenge this heavyweight writer next? Let me know by PM.
In the meantime I won't let you know who the mystery writers are. However, if they want to they can take ownership. |
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Ryan1 |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 7:57pm |
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Something about that logline made me think sci-fi. I was surprised to see the writer of B had the same general concept I did of some future plague. Opening scene ran on further than I wanted, and I would have liked to flesh out the whole plague history more, but I was pretty pleased with how this one turned out. For a two-dayer.
Gotta know who wrote those two others, though. Time to name names, Mike.
I'm guessing one of them was Leitskev. |
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leitskev |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 8:00pm |
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Nope. I wouldn't review my own work, or vote, as I did.
I offered to play though. Offered again Ryan. Not up to me. |
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mcornetto |
Posted: March 30th, 2011, 8:29pm |
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One of the authors requested that I not name them - I'm not sure if the other cares or not but I figured I'd give them the same option. They can name themselves if they want.
The next challenge is going to be Ryan vs Kevin. I'd like to give the showdowns a short rest though so we'll start next Wednesday. That ok with both of you? |
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