I voted A, though I think Tina and Artie are essentially the same character with the same humor, trading insults. That said, some of the lines were pretty funny and it fits the logline the best...

B had potential and I can see it was going for a story and not a vignette like A, however I don't think it fit the log even though a collector of sorts and a comedienne did get drunk. It was not central to the story like the log implies it should be.

C was all over the place - was there a tax collector in it?

If I had to guess I think a mod wrote A as the mystery writer. It smacks of Shelton's humor from Pimp Juice. I'm guessing Libby wrote B, so that would leave Mike as C by default. If I'm wrong, then my apologies... (0:

AJR

I voted for A last night. Thought it was okay. The banter was decent.

B didn't really stick with me for some reason. My mind wandered while reading.

C was just talking heads. Denis was too unlikable for me to care about him. Even a bastard has to have something good about them for an audience to care.

Well, This is a landslide. I'm gonna take some guesses. I don't know Libby's writing enough. She trounced me with a very realistic and visual work. If she can do the characterization in A plus the visuals she did last week, I'm thoroughly impressed.

Also, haven't heard from the reigning champ this week. He always comments and votes. He's been quiet, though that doesn't mean he's in. So here's my guesses.

A Ryan1
B Libby
C Screenrider - you give yourself away with the unoriginal jokes....

James

Yeah right, James.  Like you didn't already know.  

On behalf of my defense, it took quite a bit of time, research and creative ingenuity to write mine.   I'm just bummed I totally missed the fact that it was supposed to be a "comedienne".    Oh well.   Back to the drawing board!     Congrats to the writer of A.

Good job from all who entered - even though I agree A was a deserving victor, I think both B and C showed good signs. It's not an easy task to write in 48 hours, esepcially as we've all got other commitments - and it's better to put yourself our front than to snipe with a few word critique. Call me old fashioned, but I like a bit of character and endeavour (which all contestants have shown) as opposed to bitching, clean hands from the sidelines. Oh, and if you're going to go for snappy soundbite reviews, please make them clever.

As always, great work from Michael for coordinating a great challenge for the benefit of all. Having said that... it must be time to reveal, Mike!

Ok. Time to forget past animosities and announce who was who.    The first one I'll announce is

C- Screenrider.  

But you guys already knew that because he jumped the gun and announced it himself.

And the next name to announce is

B - Libby

Sad to see our first female champ go this time.  Good job though, Libby.

I'm really intrigued to find out who A is, but I have my suspicions that it's a returning champ...

Quoted from Dressel I'm really intrigued to find out who A is, but I have my suspicions that it's a returning champ...

Me too.  But I have my suspicions as well.

However, we'll have to wait until after the next OWC to find out.   That's when the showdowns will resume.  

Anyone up for challenging the mystery champion?

Congrats to the mystery winner! And thanks Screenrider for keeping this going for another week!

Quoted from mcornetto ...we'll have to wait until after the next OWC to find out.   That's when the showdowns will resume.

mcornetto loves a cliffhanger
Thanks, MC for running this. Has been fun!

P.S. Just wanted to add a thanks to the person who gave me a vote, so I wasn't completely red-faced, and for the v.generous comments from others.

A - A nice flow to it, good characters that hold some attention.

B- I dig some of it because it's set in the Florida Keys. That's as far as that goes.  There seems to be a lack of enthusiasm on this. There was some awkwardness in some of the writing as well. I know given the timeframe and doing this stuff to keep one sharp while having fun isn't going to become much, but still...

C- When the mystery entry gets the given logline wrong (comedianne not comedian) and scribes up Denis Leary's comedy act I frown.

It's clear the winner is A.

Ah, no need for cliffhangers.  Looks like Jwent and Dressel already guessed it was me, anyway.  

So, I had no intention of entering another one of these for awhile, but then I saw some possibilities in that logline.  I wrote this really fast to get it in on time, which explains the fizzled out ending.  I just ran out of space and then didn't have time to edit.

It's not much of a story, just two surly characters hurling insults.  I tried at the end to give them some redeeming qualities.  Anyway, it was fun to write.   Thanks for the reads n votes.

Quoted from DarrenJamesSeeley When the mystery entry gets the given logline wrong (comedianne not comedian) and scribes up Denis Leary's comedy act I frown.

Get over it, Seeley.   Accidents happen.  

And in regards to any further complaints that I plagiarised Denis Leary's act -- if your character is Denis Leary then of course you're gonna include some of his comedy bits.  I makes perfect sense.

Quoted from screenrider And in regards to any further complaints that I plagiarised Denis Leary's act -- well if your character is Denis Leary then of course you're gonna include some of his comedy bits.  I makes perfect sense.

As far as I know, comedians don't go around speaking only in their bits.  I'm not trying to be a jerk, moreso explaining why I didn't vote for yours.  It lacked creativity and seemed kind of thrown together; like you watched a lot of Comedy Central that night and decided to just use it.  I wouldn't go so far as to call it plagiarism though.

Quoted from screenrider I makes perfect sense.

Not yet you do.  You plagiarized Leary.  If you're going to write him as a character in your piece, you should've written original material for him.


Phil