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Superheroes Star Date 3322 by Barry John Terblanche - Comedy, Action - Superman after "stuffing-up" is banished from earth in 2019. He returns aboard Star Trek in year 3322 to persuade other superheroes and X-men to save earth / fight approaching BORG.  154 pages - pdf format

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Barry: Some real basic issues out of the shoot.

The formatting is off. Look at any samples here on this site. Either download some free script-writing software of buy one and the formatting will be done a automatically for you.


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V.O: A young child in the movie house; GO SUPERMAN.


Wrong format. Should be:

YOUNG CHILD (V.O)
Go Superman.


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V.O: HANCOCK shouting over the Superman movie sound. STOP!


Wrong Format and Character error. You need to intro a character before putting his dialogue in and he should be intro'd in CAPS

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MAN'S VOICE (V.O)
Stop! Cut! Hold it!

Later you have breaks in the dialogue without re-establishing who's speaking.


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Eldave1 . Thanks for your advise - input. I'll take heed to rectify.
PS: Did you read it through ~ the whole script, If so what is your opinion of it ?
Regards; Barry John Terblanche
  


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Eldave1 or any one else - Can you recommend a FREE script-writing software to download?
Regards; Barry John Terblanche


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I use writer duet - it's online based so no need to download


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Eldave1 or any one else - Can you recommend a FREE script-writing software to download?
Regards; Barry John Terblanche


Here's a l ink that list them all.

https://www.webfilmschool.com/free-screenwriting-programs-the-7-best-free-writers-software/


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Eldave1 or any one else - Can you recommend a FREE script-writing software to download?
Regards; Barry John Terblanche


Hey Barry,

The wise Anthony Cawood has written up about screenwriting software here. The post has lots of other good screenwriting related information if you keep scrolling down.

For basic formatting stuff, I would recommend Trottier's The Screenwriter's Bible and also just reading lots of pro scripts like those found here.


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Thanks, I think this is useful to a lot of us.

I just changed computers and finding great difficulty transferring Final Draft to my new PC.


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Thanks, I think this is useful to a lot of us.

I just changed computers and finding great difficulty transferring Final Draft to my new PC.


No problem - hope you find one that suits you


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Hi ALL. Re-  my posted screenplay Superheroes Star Date 3322. I understand that as a 1st time writer my script my not be written in accordance to correct format etc... I'm seeking opinions on the story / originality - good to make it on the silver screen ??   PS; Its a slow starter but its MID to END tells the story.
Regards; Barry John Terblanche    


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Hi Barry

I haven't read much as formatting and other issues pointed out make for a difficult read.

However, at first, I thought you wrote this as a bit of fun/writing exercise - But from your comment it seems like you are serious about wanting this produced - so my point would be, you have a lot of copyrighted characters and material in there, have you thought about how that would work?

Matt


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Quoted from BarryJohn
Hi ALL. Re-  my posted screenplay Superheroes Star Date 3322. I understand that as a 1st time writer my script my not be written in accordance to correct format etc... I'm seeking opinions on the story / originality - good to make it on the silver screen ??   PS; Its a slow starter but its MID to END tells the story.
Regards; Barry John Terblanche    


Hi Barry, I havenít read the script but based on the logline alone I would say this has slim to no chance of making it to screen. It would be a copyright nightmare. You have Marvel characters, DC characters, and Star Trek characters. I'm sorry to say it, but I think the best you can hope for this script is to get some practice.



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Hi Matt and Warren. Thanks for your reply / input. True in that it has multiple characters ~ copyrights. Studios are known to work together collectively for the PROFIT. We have all seen the franchise movies from the different studios - be nice to see a movie of ALL the superheroes in one. Could be the beginning of something new / different ?  I for one  am tired of the same old Avengers - X-men - justice league - shield -  etc... I'd kill to watch this movie!! READ IT. please....

Regards
Barry John Terblanche  


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Barry: Why are you trolling my website? Got these two gems from you today.


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Rest in peace
I read only one of your shorts.

You CAN go go know.... no one is going to buy.
R.I.P

Sincerely,
Barry



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NO... No..
Against my better judgment I read another one!

you really must go go now.

Barry


All because I did you the courtesy of commenting on your script? WTF is going on dude?


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Thatís not very nice.


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