Dave, are you sure it's the same Barry? Playing devil's advocate just in case...
Barry, Dave is one of the most helpful writers on this site and he knows his stuff. He's also once of the nicest blokes you'll ever meet - at the very least virtually and I'm sure IRL the experience is even better.
You'd do well to heed his advice.
And finally, an FYI we give to all newbs:: Simply Scripts is a quid-pro-quo site. Simply put
that means you get what you give. Read other scripts by other writers on this site, and you'll get read in return. Get to know the regulars and you'll learn a lot.
P.S. Is this your debut feature? Your script is 154 pages?!