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Don
Posted: February 14th, 2021, 10:28am Report to Moderator
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Fur and No Whiskers by Alexander Luis Rodriguez - Dramedy - Frederick Fuzz is a rabbit made for more than just being pulled from a top hat. He leaves his master of illusion and hits the road, suitcase full of gags in tow, next stop...comedy.  124 pages - pdf format

New writer interested in feedback on this work, please be nice


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Hey, Alexander -  over morning coffee looked at the opening page.

Title - I like it.

The spacing and margins are off.  For example - you have an extra blank line between each of your headers and the action block that follows and your margins are too wide,Your dialogue is not in the correct format and you have extra blank lines in the dialogue blocks. You need to either learn these (looks like you're using WORD) or get yourself some screenwriting software that does this automatically.  No one is going to read beyond page one if the script is not in the basic screenwriting format - sorry - but that's just how it is.

This:


Quoted Text
EXT. AMERICAN HIGHWAY. MORNING.


As well as all your headings are in the wrong format. It should be:

EXT. AMERICAN HIGHWAY - MORNING

Google - how to write scene headings and you'll find a ton of free examples not the correct format.

Best of luck. Welcome to the site. It is a good one


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AlexanderLR
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Really appreciate that you had a look so thank you for that. Yeah wasn't 100% with the format, so instead of;

                                  FREDERICK FUZZ
        
         There's gotta be
         food around here
         somewhere?

should it read;

                                  FREDERICK FUZZ
                                  
                                  There's gotta be
                                  food around here
                                  somewhere?          

Could you recommend some screenwriting software? I'm not all that technical mind you, but I'm learning slowly.   I'm going to take your advice and upload it again with the necessary changes - i'm assuming you can reupload? Anyway, yeah, appreciate it.
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Alexander try -

https://www.trelby.org/
That's free software.

And see this recent link:
https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?m-1613628698/s-9/highlight-/#num9

Newbs guide to SS:
https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-cc/m-1124159895/

Screenwriting Class:
https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-screenwrite/

Introduce yourself:
https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-knowyou/


P.S. Submit the new draft to Don/Admin via the same submission link you originally used but be sure to say it's an updated draft of the same script. Perhaps get the software downloaded and rewrite first.

Software makes your job a lot easier as it formats everything automatically.



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Matthew Taylor
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Try the below link

http://downloads.bbc.co.uk/writersroom/scripts/screenplay.pdf

Itís old but a good starting point for film script format basics.

To go more in-depth I would recommend the Screenwriters Bible by David Trottier


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Quoted from AlexanderLR
Really appreciate that you had a look so thank you for that. Yeah wasn't 100% with the format, so instead of;

                                  FREDERICK FUZZ
        
         There's gotta be
         food around here
         somewhere?

should it read;

                                  FREDERICK FUZZ
                                  
                                  There's gotta be
                                  food around here
                                  somewhere?          

Could you recommend some screenwriting software? I'm not all that technical mind you, but I'm learning slowly.   I'm going to take your advice and upload it again with the necessary changes - i'm assuming you can reupload? Anyway, yeah, appreciate it.


The second one - but no blank space between the character name and the dialogue.

I use Final Draft - you can go to their site and try a trial version for free for 30 days


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Great thanks for the help
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Quoted from AlexanderLR
Great thanks for the help


No prob - good luck


My Scripts can all be seen here:

http://dlambertson.wix.com/scripts
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I wrote an article that covers many of the relevant screenwriting software choices...

https://anthonycawood.wordpress.com/2016/09/30/screenwriting-software/

As the other have said, use one of these and the formatting is all taken care of for you.

Best


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