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SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board    One Week Challenge    February 2011 One Week Challenge  ›  ...And I Take You - Feb 2011 OWC Moderators: Angry Bear
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greg
Posted: March 10th, 2011, 11:45pm Report to Moderator
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Hey Brian, thanks for the read and congrats on Captive!  One of the creepiest of the bunch, no doubt.  


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While I like the visual of the old man in the oven, I'm not sure it makes sense story-wise.  


You're absolutely right.  When you've got a week to write something, sometimes you just don't even think about those nitty gritties.

Thanks again!

Greg


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Posted: March 17th, 2011, 7:23am Report to Moderator
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I liked this script, though I think it deserves a rewrite.  The OWC rushed it.

My only problem with it is that the sidhe spoke with a modern day voice.  This kept taking me out of the illusion that Mickey was talking with a supernatural entity.  Maybe this was your way of saying that she didn't exist and it was all in Mickey's head.  I don't know, but it didn't work for me.

Again, rewrite it.  Add to it.  It's a good story.


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Hi Phil,

Thanks for the read and your input!  I'm glad you liked it.  Good idea - a future rewrite will consider that.

Thanks again.

Greg


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