Ian,  

When 'Indicating' (capitalizing) sounds, the general rule is to only capitalize sounds which have a dramatic impact  to the story.  For instance  " a door SLAMS shut", example of what not to cap - "she clears her throat".  Same rule can be used for action desciptions i.e.  "she SHOOTS him in foot".  Keep in mind that caps such as these are not required in non-shooting drafts however, so really it comes down to the prefrence of the writer.

Ok, thanks a lot people. I'm just trying to decide if I'm going to do it in my next script, when I get to start writing it that is  . Which reminds me, how are the finals going Oney? Or have you finished? I have 6 exams left (and 3 are tomorrow!!).

Ian

Hey Ian,

  My last day of school was Wendseday, I passed all my finals. I graduate tomorrow night. Anyways, what exactly is your next script about? I'm getting anxious to read another by you. I had to hault on my script, because I don't know much about witchcraft and wicca religion and I had to do some research on that. Do good on your exams.  

My next one is a rather basic teen slasher. I can't really say anymore because it will give too much away. I'm not really sure how it's going to turn out and if people will like it. It won't be done for a while either.

How much of yours had you written before you put it on hold?

I have FINALLY started work on that "next script" I kept on refering to! I have done about 12 pages lol. I can't say when it will be finished because I simply have no idea. Sometimes everything just falls into place and I write like crazy, and other times nothing happens at all! Hopefully some of the people that read Just Before Dawn will take a look when it's completed. And don't worry, it's not an adaptation .

Ian

Love to read it once it's finished, e-mail me copy?

Sure. I've worked on it some more today and now have 20 pages done. Hopefully the majority of it will come with ease. I don't want it to take too long to complete as I've been waiting to get this thing done since last summer! Thanks for the interest.

Ian

          I am (if you see this as good or bad) one who enjoys remakes, I don't know why. I just do. Especially this shit from th 1980's, this was a very boring film and I just didn't care for it.

         You have written this "backwoods camping" chop 'em script and you have the CARLY picture as your icon. I take it, you like your horror in the sticks? Anyways...

         This film needed a refreshing view on its story and you've created a semi-faithful script of the original. The setup in the beginning with the family and Freya(what kind of name is that) and Jodi was paced perfect for the opening. Your characters were all original and could easily be distinguished, I'm very pleased you didn't add any more characters were it would've been like "who are you again".
          I liked how you changed some of the death scenes around and you added to the chase sequences. You totally threw me off and I was utterly shocked when SPOILER.............Kansas was killed. That would look so damn awesome on screen. I do actually have one slight complaint, the sequence toward the end when the girls reach the families house and discover the "truth" was WAY longer then it should've been.

         Overall, I'd have to say not bad at all.  

Wow, I was surprised to find another review for this script this late in the game lol.

Yes, I love backwoods horror, which is why I wanted to write one of my own. I agree that it was a boring film, which is why I did this script. I took all the good bits, added to them, and replaced the boring stuff. Speaking of which, I’m planning to turn this into an original, which will mean some drastic changes to the story and alterations to several scenes. It won’t affect it too much though, because so much of this is my own rather than copied from the film (which is why I want to make it my own rather than a remake). Any suggestions of what should be changed for the new version would be appreciated .

I’m glad you thought I refreshed the story, with mention to the characters, death scenes and chases. These are things I worked really hard on. I’m also pleased that Kansas’ death came as a shock. That was definitely my intention lol. She’s my favourite character and it seems a lot of readers felt the same way. Her character and death have certainly gone down quite well. I wanted it to be my signature death for the film (like Carly’s impressive decapitation in Wrong Turn), the one that everyone remembers. That’s why I saved it for a character who appeared pegged for survival and one that the readers cared for.
Looking back on that scene at the house, it makes me cringe. Yes it’s long, and the dialogue is awful. It’s so on the nose. So much exposition. I find it to be unbearably cheesy, and I admit that I kind of rushed it. The last 30 or so pages were kind of rushed. I’d been working on the script for months and just had to finish. Once all the build up was done, I just went for it with all the killing and chasing lol. I’ll be more careful with the re-write.

Thanks for your comments, it’s nice to see people are still looking at this! It is however a little embarrassing as I’ve improved since this and there are so many glaring errors that it makes me blush lol.

Ian

I liked this script also but after reading it i decided to look it up and it's already a movie Just Before Dawn (1981) go to IMDB.com look it up!

The script is a remake of the 1981 film.

Ian - I guess we have just learned from this thread that when your script is TOO good, people get jealous and start to criticize. I'd actually take the nutcase who started bashing your work as your biggest compliment. Haha.  I mean to actually have someone searing with so much jealousy that they have to come here and attack you so much is very sad but also very funny.  

The only true fact here is that a well-written script, original or not, can only be written by a talented person. Period. You are very talented.

DDP, are you aware that this discussion took place in 2005? The discussion was finished a long time ago.

--Julio

IAN,
Have you written anything else these days?

Quoted from ReaperCreeper DDP, are you aware that this discussion took place in 2005?

Yes, the dates are on every post.

Quoted Text The discussion was finished a long time ago.

So? I read the thread and I felt I wanted to comment on the discussion, not participate in it, which is clearly impossible since it took place many months ago.

Quoted Text IAN, Have you written anything else these days?

Yes, I'd also like to know if this author is still around and if he has more works of this genre.



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