Below are a few recently updated loglines of mine. Please let me know if there’s room for improvement, and rank them for me in terms of most intriguing to least.

1) Uncomfortable Creatures - A tight-knit family enlists help from radical activists after a strange creature materializes in their home, and together they evade a secret society of hunters who have access to deadly alien technology.

2) Tubers -  Test tube humans first awaken inside a small civilization surrounded by a camouflaged container to keep them captive, and a young “Tuber” discovers she and others are being monitored and manipulated to entertain their creators.

3) Try - Bio-engineered animals with homicidal agendas and patient zero of the zombie apocalypse are created by a condemned scientist, working with activists to help torture and kill all humans in retaliation for mass species extinction.

4) Molten Age - Circling the globe in seconds duplicates a racecar driver on a mission to simultaneously traverse Earth's corners and freeze its scorching surface, while accompanying scientists interfere violently after light speed travel turns them psychotic.

That's a bunch of ideas right there! Fairly, they are not that clear to me. Maybe consider to rewrite them and try to write them short and crisp. Write your loglines simple. Writing too much makes it seem crammed up.

My ranking goes like(from most understood to least understood):

TUBERS

UNCOMFORTABLE CREATURES

TRY

MOLTEN AGE

Hope this helps.

Good luck.

Thanks! I will think about how to make them shorter and clearer.

Quoted from Hank Thanks! I will think about how to make them shorter and clearer.

Your welcome.

UPDATES:

Uncomfortable Creatures - A tight-knit family sees a strange creature materialize inside their home, and with help from radical activists, they evade a secret society who hunts monsters using alien technology.

Tubers - Test tube humans first awaken inside a small civilization, trapped by a camouflaged container, and a young “Tuber” realizes she and others are manipulated to entertain their creators.

Try - An enraged cult blames humans for mass species extinction and recruits a condemned scientist to torture their own kind, by creating murderous bio-engineered animals and flesh-eating zombies.