A really, really short piece, which could have used the pages not used to build more of a story and add some jokes.  Where did Jack get this doctor from?  There was some nice use of repetition to set up the ending, but between that and the calendar pages, we kind of know where this is going.  The challenge theme kind of gives it away too.  

Like everyone else, this could have used some humor.  I think the intent was dark humor, but it doesn't come out enough, except the end, which seems to be the punchline to the untold joke.

"Goodnight Jack" was extremely well written.  It didn't however fit the rules of the challenge because it wasn't really a comedy and Jack wasn't a lantern.

However, of my assigned reads, I gave you the number one position because at least you had showed true creativity and you weren't using cheap tactics to try and generate some interest.

You gave the plastic surgeon some character and the little things you injected into the script like his spitting on the scalpel brought this one to life.

Congratulations on a job well done.

Sandra

As others have said the ending was fairly predictable, however, I had the advantage of knowing what the theme was. I also thought the ending was a little bit too convenient; most of this story was set in the real world and then you ended it by breaking the rules of the world you had created. That, plus it wasn't really a comedy.

Sorry, but this left me a little flat.  

Hi everyone,

It's not an excuse but I just had two days to write my script and I have to admit that Halloween in France is not a big tradition as it is in the USA. We don't have any local legend about it and it is more a commercial event here (for about 3 or 4 years) than anything else. Anyway, I tried to bring my stone to the building.

Thank you for those who liked it.

Michel

Michel,

I thought you did good here. I know that English is a problem for you so I look past little hiccups with wrong use of words and things like that.

Having read through the previous comments, I guess I'm the only one that found any humor in this. Especially the part with Dr. Marcel.

Dr. "are you a fan of Brigitte Bardot?

Jack "who?"

Dr. "Americans "

I found that to be sooo spot on.

Also spitting on the scalpel and testing it on Sarkozy's picture.
And not knowing about the saving France part.

Everyone's said this was predictable, but I wonder how many would say the same if they did not know this was part of an assignment where the theme was to carve a Jack O Lantern?

I think you did fine with this script. It may not have been LOL funny, but I did chuckle a few times.

Pia