I had a frustrating day at work and needed something to turn my mood around. I saw your name on this and I had to read it. I wasn’t disappointed. Thank you.

I love the double twist. I admit that I wasn’t completely surprised but delighted nonetheless. This was a nice read and put me in a Hallmark mood.

I read through the comments and may have a couple of things to add.

You use O.C. (Off Camera) instead of O.S. (Off Screen). I have seen a comment for a different script where it was pointed out that O.C. is archaic and mostly used for television. Personally, I don’t think it makes a difference although I did swap out all my O.C.s for O.S.s in something I wrote and I have used O.S. since.  I thought I would share that.

On page 15, there is a line from Mr. Nelson, “Yes your honor. If it please the court, this is…”
I think it should read, “Yes your honor. May it please the court, this is…”

I noticed that you like to bold your scene headers. I also noticed that on page 33 and at the top of page 46, there are headers that you didn’t bold.  I don’t know if that was intentional, but I thought I would point it out in case it wasn’t.

I didn’t find any typos. I look forward to your next story.

Kathy, I breezed through this with not a lot of scrutiny but note a couple of minor things, spaces missing in a slug or two etc.

I notice you FADE OUT at one point and didn't FADE UP again.

The room buzzes with LAWYERS and STAFF preparing for yet
another day of legal battles. SARAH ELLIS, (late 20s) a
paralegal, a little frumpy perhaps, sits at her desk which is
currently overrun with Christmas DECOR - a small tacky tree,
an elf on the shelf, cheap tinsel strung about. Sarah
plainly loves Christmas. She “oohs and ahhs” over some image
on her smartphone. A YOUNG WOMAN (late 20s) approaches;
professional, polished. This is E. MARGARET “MEGGIE” PEARSON,
she carries a legal file in one hand, briefcase in the
other. She stops to take in the sight. Sarah is not only
her assistant but her friend and confidant.

I would definitely split that para (considering it's introductions) of two separate characters. Not to mention your main character (star) deserves an intro para of her own.

I wonder about this line towards the end, if 'one' is a typo.

MEGGIE
And for once you were one time.
He's late a lot, right?
On time?

If Hallmark hasn't called you yet they should.
Very nicely done.
And not a Nurse in sight.  

I think 'the power of love' in the wording of the voice-over would have worked better to finish with, but hey, everyone's a critic, right?

Kathy, that is amazing news re your producing leads. Prayers, good thoughts, crossed fingers, touch wood, rabbit's foot, the lot.

Btw, did these producers contact you from seeing your work here?