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Posted: September 4th, 2023, 3:00pm Report to Moderator
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Overcoming the limits of love by Lorena Venticinque - Series, Drama, Love - It's not the limits of your past that deprive you of loving. 472 pages - pdf format

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Hi Lorena, I gave this a look and my advice is this:
I suggest you post a Pilot Episode of your series, otherwise 472 pages is very daunting.

Also CAP your characters on first intro.
Is English your first language? Some of your dialogue is a bit stilted and missing prepositions.

Happy to offer more advice if you're around.
A couple of links to help below.

https://screencraft.org/blog/how-to-structure-a-great-tv-pilot/
https://www.studiobinder.com/b.....%20the%20same%20time.



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Far too long to read through. Break it down and pilot the first episode.

Enough said.


Groundbreaking scripts:

The Pearl Earring
No Time For Love
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