Thanks, prodigal.

As for stuff yet to come? Well, I must confess that there is actually quite a bit of stuff out there already. This short (along with The Mutation Encounter) was intended to be a bit of a teaser for the larger works. Click on The Fempiror Chronicles in my sig and you'll find it. It's also under the "series" portion of the boards. This short is part of that canon.

I really liked this script. It was action packed and all the characters felt like real people to me, and this short actually got a movie playing in my mind unlike most scripts.

Cool.

This was a really nice read with lot's of action. Definately a good script. I still have to get to Fempiror, and I'm sure that's ten times better than this.

I think this is one of my favorites on the site. Great work George... (Sorry I'm not good at reviewing.) At least you know I read your script.

Oh yeah, and I had absolutely no problems with it. Which is an A in my book.

5/5

Not sure about that whole Fempiror thing? Today's script of the day is a niblet of the bigger picture...

well this was the script of the day so I decided to give it a gander.

*************possible spoilers****************

This was a pretty cool script, kind of a vampire like tale, even though there are no fangs or blood sucking, but it had all the other elements.

The first part of the story reminded me of Oliver in a way, yoder being an evil sadistic Fagin.

on page 9 Erech says "you're a fine lot"  I have no idea what that means, but I maybe it's me and it actually does mean something, if it does, that's my bad.

I like how Erech started hacking eveybody up, like uma in kill bill, well not that graphic but still...cool

all in all this was a fun easy read.  Good work

Thanks for reading, boywhocouldfly.

"Lot" is shorthand English for a lot of "something", which in this case is people. That phrase is typically used sarcastically to refer to people who are being two-faced or living up to a double standard where the speaker doesn't fit the new mold due to something that was recently discovered.

So, when someone says "you're a fine lot," what they're really saying is "you all suck."

thanks, I'm not really good with british slang, so know I learnd something