Wow, that my friend, was a very slick piece of writing. It was great how you managed to fit all those Terminator references into just 8 pages and still keep the story rolling along at a nice pace. My favorite was the "just what you see on the menu," line, but there were a few more I dug as well. A John Connor reference was about the only thing missing from this and I'm not sure how I felt about the Dick Cheeney thing, but they're only minor concerns. Very impressive. 8/10

I loved this one, probably the funniest I've read out of these so far, I loved the "i be black" line, plus the hooker was funny as well.  Good job.  

The thing that pissed me off is that I might be afriad now to order fried chickin cause I'll be thinking of rat from now on, thanks a lot >

Hahaha. I like it a lot. A great little spoof. I didn't want it to end. The writing is slick and to the point. A few too many CAPS and camera directions, but it wasn't too distracting.

It'll be interesting to see who wrote this.

Good work.

I found this amusing at times and could see it turning into something really good with some revisions.  You should be careful about crossing the line between pardody and racism.

And get rid of the directions like, 'you know the drill' and 'yep. he's the bad terminator.'  They were a little distracting.


Phil

Stephen

Great parody, had me laughing out loud, this one!

Well done, great little script..


Kevan

Stephen R. Francis, I don't recognize your name, but you should come around here more often.

I guess Breanne wasn't that crazy about your story, but the fact that I thought she wrote it is the biggest compliment that I can give you.

She's in a league of her own.

Quoted from tomson I guess Breanne wasn't that crazy about your story,...

Yeah, I wasn’t too big on this one. It looks like I’m the only one though. Dogglebe hit on my biggest problem. I felt kind of like the racial stereotype humor came off as a little borderline racism. I don’t believe that was the author’s intent. I think if it had maybe a clever social subtext or something, it could have had a different feel. As it is, I felt its humor was a little cheap. The author has little to worry about, though. One lukewarm review out of so many hot ones is pretty darn good. And I could always be wrong.

With so many rave reviews, this author definitely accomplished what he set out to do so in that respect, it’s a hit and a job well done.

I'm with Breanne when I say this was alright.  Didn't really tie in with the theme, but it looks like it was well-received.  Racism really doesn't bother me, and actually some of those sterotypes were kind of funny.  But some of these reviews are kind of sheisty.  Heaven on paper?  I could have swore someone put that down.      

The only question I have is, what pimp wears Converses?