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Posted: May 16th, 2011, 8:34am Report to Moderator
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Hey Ste,

Oh, I got it, but it did lead to a question.
Why the heck didn't the poor schmucks that came after him get sprayed too.

E.D.


Good question...

It would kill the living as it stops the skin from 'breathing'. Hence Subject A can have it done because he's already dead.


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Posted: May 19th, 2011, 6:43pm Report to Moderator
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Thought that this was ok, but not much more. Can't really be done in five pages - it was more like a script for a trailer - good - but it deserves a lot more to it that was available - it is also too much like a reworking of Terminator - give this fifty pages and flesh out some characters, and there's a good script here, but nothing that hasn't been done before.
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I enjoyed this script. My only critique would be the story of an artificial soldier seeking vengeance has been done to death in this particular genre. I do commend you for packing so much into 5 pages, It may have made the exposition a little daunting but at least it's never boring.

The only thing about the ending is I didn't want Subject A to kill himself, but thats just me, I don't like tragedy.

Overall a very nice quick read.


Hemingway had a poster on the wall above his work desk that said, "The first draft of anything is shit.". I also have that poster.
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