Quoted from Equinox I think it's as strange as a policeman exitedly pointing his gun at someone. Just doesn't reflect a realistic behaviour imo.

I imagine that certain police officers would get excited while pointing their gun at someone, as is evident from they shooting unarmed people. There's a certain level of excitement to be had when you have ultimate power over somebody else. A police uniform doesn't make any difference. It's still a human being wearing it.

I think you're confused with the differences between ideal and realistic behaviour.

Quoted from DustinBowcot I imagine that certain police officers would get excited while pointing their gun at someone, as is evident from they shooting unarmed people. There's a certain level of excitement to be had when you have ultimate power over somebody else. A police uniform doesn't make any difference. It's still a human being wearing it. I think you're confused with the differences between ideal and realistic behaviour.

Well, okay - you're probably right about U.S. cops, but it's not realistic here

Quoted from Equinox Well, okay - you're probably right about U.S. cops, but it's not realistic here

I wouldn't really know as the police in my country do not carry guns. They just enjoy tasering people and spraying them with pepper. They drive around, seven or eight strong, with weapons, looking for trouble. To cause trouble I mean. Some innocent guy walking home after a night out, doesn't want to be hassled. Van load of arseholes pull up, ask questions and try to provoke an attitude, as soon as they get what they want, they kick the shit out of you... and they're quite excited when they do so.

Anyway, I think the issue here, is that we're both perhaps thinking of different types of excitement. The word can have different connotations depending upon the context. Sexually excited will look different to a hunter's excitement. It just depends. It is then up to the reader to place the action within the correct context. To have the image of a sexually excited man who is just excited at the prospect of something good coming on the TV would be wrong... I think.

I'd really like to see an actor successfully transfer the state of excitement while he's crawling after a rabbit. If that turns out any way similar to the image I have of this, I'm pretty sure any rabbit in a radius of several miles would be gone until he reached his destination.

If I imagine a hunter in the forrest who spots a rabbit, I'd think he'd sneak to a good shooting position. He'd crawl slowly and quietly. If that hunter got excited just because he saw a rabbit, I'd have to ask myself - what did this guy hunt before? Flies? Cockroaches?

Quoted from Equinox I'd really like to see an actor successfully transfer the state of excitement while he's crawling after a rabbit.

Well Elmer Fudd managed it.

Quoted from DustinBowcot Well Elmer Fudd managed it.

Yeah, seems like we're on the same page now

Quoted from Equinox Yeah, seems like we're on the same page now

I highly doubt that... and, I'm very high.

The guy located a target. He's excited about the prospect of sneaking up and killing his prey.
In hindsight, perhaps I could of used other descriptions, maybe "anticipating the kill, he crawls back into the woods" or something, but I dunno.... seems fine to me as it is.

Just because he's wearing camouflage and owns a gun does not mean he's particularly skilled at hunting. He hits two targets, but messes up the third. He's not that good. He's just an office bod who probably does a bit of hunting now and then to take out his stress. I could add more to his description to help avoid this confusion, or have him running "carelessly" with a loaded gun.

I wanted readers to paint their own picture of how Guy looked, but in my feeble excuse of a brain he would have appeared something like this:



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