On The Dotted Line by John Stone - Short, Comedy - Chuck Spunt opening sketch begins with a complaint concerning a failed bank transaction. 8 pages

Produced and performed on BBC Sounds - Radio Essex

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This was entertaining. I have made a similar mistake on more occasions than I care to admit.

I could feel the frustration building. Nice.

Quoted from D.A.Banaszak This was entertaining. I have made a similar mistake on more occasions than I care to admit. I could feel the frustration building. Nice.

Me too, Michael. Glad that you enjoyed this one too.

I'm finally getting a chance to sit down and read some of these today.  This one did not disappoint!  It reminded me of the Facebook joke of the old man trying to create an acceptable online password, with its increasing frustration of the protagonist.  I think we've all probably experienced this at least once i.e. trying to swipe my Kroger membership card at Costco.  Oops - glad I didn't make too much of a scene before this was gently pointed out as my problem. Ugh!  Really well written short and totally relatable.  Loved it!

Hey, John.

I kept thinking how this would turn out but came up short.
Frustration building. Dialogue spot on, felt natural and funny.
Good work.

Frank

Check out “On The Dotted Line” performed Thursday 20th from 6pm. British time.                        https://www.bbc.co.uk/programmes/p08q3hsh

Sounds like Congrats are in order, John!
I'm assuming that link is not active yet... But will look out for it.

Thanks Libby.

The link is active. You can hear the play being perfromed from 6pm GMT.

Should be fun.

That was very entertaining!
Time code for others wanting to listen: 1:05:00

Thanks for checking that out Libby.

Quoted from LC That was very entertaining! Time code for others wanting to listen: 1:05:00

Thanks for this, Libby.  I tried to tune in to the live version but never got to this part.  John, I'm excited to hear your work performed.  Will check back in after I have a chance to listen to it.

https://www.bbc.co.uk/sounds/p.....p;    Fed 105 hrs and listen in.

Loved it, John!  There's just something about the spoken word that brings a script to life.  It was very easy for me to visual the entire scene while listening.  Funny stuff! Glad they decided to to air it.

So glad you liked it Kathy. Thank you for listening. Don’t forget to upload your stuff if you want it aired. Shorts are best.

Congratulations!